列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบของคุณดีแล้วที่ตอบตรงคำถามและมีรายละเอียด แต่ควรปรับปรุงให้ประโยคมีความเชื่อมโยงกันมากขึ้น และใช้คำศัพท์ที่หลากหลายขึ้น เช่น แทนที่จะพูดว่า "the thing that I need" ควรใช้คำว่า "the items I need" หรือ "necessary products" เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

範例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list, especially during big sales like Double Day. I prefer shopping on online platforms such as Shopee or Lazada, so having a list helps me remember all the items I need to buy.

建議: คำตอบนี้ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น ใช้ "because" หรือ "so that" อย่างถูกต้อง และควรแก้ไขไวยากรณ์ เช่น "I wouldn't forgot" เป็น "I wouldn't forget" นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและหลากหลายกว่า

範例: Yes, I often make a to-do list on my mobile phone app because it helps me organize my work tasks one by one. This way, I don't forget anything and can complete all my duties efficiently.

建議: คำตอบนี้ดีที่มีการเปรียบเทียบความคิดเห็นของคนอื่นและความคิดเห็นส่วนตัว แต่ควรใช้คำเชื่อมที่หลากหลาย เช่น "however" แทน "but" และปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์ เช่น "making list" เป็น "making lists" เพื่อความถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติ

範例: Some people may think that making lists wastes time because they have to write down tasks one by one; however, I personally find it very useful since it helps me remember all the tasks I need to complete.

建議: คำตอบนี้ควรปรับปรุงให้มีความเชื่อมโยงระหว่างประโยคมากขึ้น และใช้คำศัพท์ที่หลากหลาย เช่น แทนที่จะใช้ "love both" อาจใช้ "I like both methods" และเพิ่มคำเชื่อม เช่น "however" เพื่อแสดงความเปรียบเทียบอย่างชัดเจน

範例: Personally, I like both methods. Writing on paper gives a physical feeling; however, I usually don't carry paper with me, so I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient.

× I make a list for shopping especially on double day sale.

✓ I make a list for shopping especially on double day sales.

The phrase 'double day sale' is incorrect; it should be plural 'double day sales' to refer to multiple sales events. This is a quantifier and noun agreement issue, so correcting the noun to plural form is necessary.

× I usually shop on online platform like Shopee or Lazada.

✓ I usually shop on online platforms like Shopee or Lazada.

The phrase 'on online platform' is incorrect because 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' when referring to multiple examples like Shopee or Lazada. Also, 'on' is correct here because we refer to online platforms as locations.

× So I would always make a list so that I wouldn't forget to buy the thing that I need.

✓ So I would always make a list so that I wouldn't forget to buy the things that I need.

The word 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items that the speaker needs to buy. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I frequently make To Do List on application in the mobile phone my work including a lot of tags, so I would like to organize those tasks 1 by 1 so that I wouldn't forgot doing it and I can do it.

✓ I frequently make a To Do List on an application on my mobile phone for my work, including a lot of tags, so I like to organize those tasks one by one so that I don't forget to do them and I can complete them.

Several preposition errors: 'on application' should be 'on an application'; 'in the mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone'; 'my work' needs a preposition 'for my work'. Also, 'forgot doing it' is incorrect; it should be 'forget to do them'. This correction addresses preposition use and verb form.

× so that I wouldn't forgot doing it and I can do it.

✓ so that I wouldn't forget to do it and I can do it.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense but should be the base form 'forget' after 'wouldn't' (would not). Also, 'doing it' should be 'to do it' for correct verb form after 'forget'.

× Some people may think that making list is wasting time because you have to list down what you would do 1 by 1, but personally I think it's quite useful because you will not forget any tasks that you list.

✓ Some people may think that making a list is a waste of time because you have to list down what you would do one by one, but personally I think it's quite useful because you will not forget any tasks that you list.

'Making list' should be 'making a list' (article needed). 'Wasting time' should be 'a waste of time' (correct noun phrase). '1 by 1' should be 'one by one' (spelling out numbers in formal speech). These are quantifier and article usage issues.

× Personally I love both. When you write you can feel it physically but I usually don't have any paper with me so I would normally write it on phone because it's more convenient to do so.

✓ Personally, I love both. When you write, you can feel it physically, but I usually don't have any paper with me, so I would normally write it on my phone because it's more convenient to do so.

Missing commas for clarity. 'On phone' should be 'on my phone' to correctly use the possessive pronoun. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and article.