列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하게 들리도록 문법과 표현을 개선하세요. 예를 들어, 'makes me more easy to buy' 대신 'makes it easier for me to shop'와 같이 표현하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 중복되는 내용을 줄이고 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me shop more efficiently and avoid impulse purchases. Also, having a list allows me to make better choices about what to buy.

建議: 답변에서 문법 오류를 줄이고, 문장을 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'makes me to work more efficiently' 대신 'helps me work more efficiently'라고 표현하세요. 또한, 두 번째 문장은 좀 더 구체적으로 연결하여 자연스럽게 만드세요.

範例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me work more efficiently. Since the company has a limited budget, planning tasks carefully is very important.

建議: 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하고, 문장을 더 명확하고 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'people spend the time while they trying to making a list' 대신 'people find making lists time-consuming and boring'과 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

範例: I think some people find making lists boring because it takes time and they prefer to shop spontaneously without planning.

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문장이 길고 복잡합니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 질문에 직접적으로 답하세요. 예를 들어, 'I prefer to make a list on my phone because it saves time and helps me manage my budget better.'와 같이 표현하세요.

範例: I prefer to make a list on my phone because it helps me save time while shopping and manage my budget more effectively.

× Yeah, when I go to the shopping I try to make a list because it makes me more easy to buy and avoid impulse buying.

✓ Yeah, when I go shopping I try to make a list because it makes it easier for me to buy and avoid impulse buying.

'The shopping' is incorrect because 'shopping' is an uncountable noun here and does not require the definite article 'the'. Also, 'more easy' should be 'easier' to correctly form the comparative adjective. The phrase 'makes me more easy to buy' is awkward; it should be 'makes it easier for me to buy'.

× Yeah, I usually make a list for my work, umm, because it makes me to work more efficiently.

✓ Yeah, I usually make a list for my work, umm, because it helps me work more efficiently.

The phrase 'makes me to work' is incorrect. The verb 'make' when followed by another verb does not use 'to'. Also, 'makes me work' is more natural than 'makes me to work'. Using 'helps me work' is even clearer and more idiomatic.

× And you know, the company has a limited budget, so it makes more efficient.

✓ And you know, the company has a limited budget, so it makes things more efficient.

The sentence lacks an object after 'makes'. 'Makes more efficient' is incomplete; it should be 'makes things more efficient' or 'makes the process more efficient'.

× I think it is really boring things because people spend the time while they trying to making a list and also when they go to the shop and if they want another buy products.

✓ I think it is really boring because people spend time trying to make a list and also when they go to the shop and want to buy other products.

'Boring things' is incorrect; 'boring' should describe the activity or situation, not 'things'. 'Spend the time' should be 'spend time' without 'the'. 'They trying to making' is incorrect; it should be 'they are trying to make' or simply 'trying to make'. 'Another buy products' is incorrect; it should be 'buy other products'.

× I prefer to make a list because I'm a efficient person so I'm trying to reduce my time while shopping so and even though no and also I don't have a lot of money so I'm trying to making a list and reduce my money.

✓ I prefer to make a list because I'm an efficient person, so I'm trying to reduce my time while shopping. Also, I don't have a lot of money, so I'm trying to make a list to save money.

'A efficient' is incorrect; 'efficient' starts with a vowel sound, so it should be 'an efficient'. The sentence is run-on and unclear; it needs to be split for clarity. 'Trying to making' is incorrect; it should be 'trying to make'. 'Reduce my money' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'save money'. The phrase 'so and even though no' is unclear and should be removed for clarity.