列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, instead of repeating 'forget' multiple times, say 'I usually make a list when I shop because I tend to forget items easily.'

範例: I usually make a list when I shop because I tend to forget what to buy if I don't write it down. This helps me stay organized and avoid buying unnecessary things.

建議: Make your answer more direct and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details. Avoid vague phrases like 'us people' and improve grammar. For example, say 'Yes, I make lists for work because they help me remember tasks, especially since many people nowadays tend to forget things easily.'

範例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me remember important tasks. Since many people, including myself, tend to forget things easily nowadays, lists keep me organized and productive.

建議: Improve clarity and grammar by completing your sentences and avoiding awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'Some people dislike making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom to buy whatever they want. Also, having a list can make shopping feel stressful for some, so they prefer not to use one.'

範例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel it limits their freedom to choose what to buy. Additionally, having a list can make shopping feel stressful, so they prefer to shop spontaneously.

建議: Make your answer more concise and natural by correcting grammar and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example, say 'I prefer making lists on my phone because paper lists can get lost easily, but my phone keeps the list safe and accessible.'

範例: I prefer to make my shopping lists on my phone because paper lists can easily get lost. With my phone, I can always access the list anytime without worrying about losing it.

× I usually make a list whenever I shop because I have this forgetfulness every time I go shopping and buying everything I easily forgot what should I buy.

✓ I usually make a list whenever I shop because I am forgetful every time I go shopping and when buying everything, I easily forget what I should buy.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'this forgetfulness' which is awkward; 'I am forgetful' is more natural. Also, 'buying everything I easily forgot' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'when buying everything, I easily forget'. The verb tense is corrected to present tense to match the habitual action.

× Generally yes it does work for us people since nowadays peoples are tend to forget easily things and that's the problem of our generation right now.

✓ Generally, yes it does work for us people since nowadays people tend to forget things easily and that's the problem of our generation right now.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural form. Also, 'are tend to' is incorrect; it should be 'tend to'. The adverb 'easily' should come after 'forget' for correct word order.

× I think some people don't like making this because they feel it restricts their freedom to buy whatever they want.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom to buy whatever they want.

The pronoun 'this' is incorrectly used to refer to 'making lists'; it should be 'making lists' explicitly for clarity and correctness.

× Also having a list can sometimes make shopping feel more like a stressful for some, but for this reason they prefer.

✓ Also, having a list can sometimes make shopping feel more stressful for some, and for this reason, they prefer not to make one.

The phrase 'more like a stressful' is incorrect; 'more stressful' is the correct adjective form. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'and for this reason, they prefer not to make one' clarifies the meaning.

× I do prefer to make a list on my phone since a paper can easily go away or go missing, but on my phone it actually in there and I can easily access without finding a piece of paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone since paper can easily get lost, but on my phone, it is actually there and I can easily access it without looking for a piece of paper.

The phrase 'go away or go missing' is awkward; 'get lost' is more natural. 'It actually in there' is missing a verb; corrected to 'it is actually there'. Also, 'access without finding' is incorrect; it should be 'access it without looking for'.