列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your sentences natural and effective. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me buy only what I need. This way, I avoid forgetting items and save time at the store.

建議: Your answer is informative but could be more structured and fluent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid short, choppy sentences. Also, clarify your points with specific examples and correct minor grammar mistakes.

範例: Yes, I work as a PSW and during night shifts, I make a list to stay organized. For instance, I note when to give water to each individual, which helps me manage my time effectively.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas more naturally and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to improve coherence and provide more specific reasons.

範例: Some people dislike making lists because they find writing things down tedious. Additionally, they may prefer to remember tasks mentally rather than using paper or phone notes.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid unnecessary phrases and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to use varied vocabulary to express your preference.

範例: I prefer making my shopping list on my phone because it's quicker and more convenient than searching for paper and pen. Using the notes app helps me stay organized easily.

× Indeed, when I make a list what I have to shop, it's really helpful for me because I can just match my list and I can buy things which I wanted, but if I do not make least so it will be not easy for me to buy.

✓ Indeed, when I make a list of what I have to shop for, it's really helpful for me because I can just match my list and I can buy things which I want, but if I do not make a list, it will not be easy for me to buy.

The phrase 'make a list what I have to shop' is missing the preposition 'of' and the preposition 'for' after 'shop' to correctly link the objects. Also, 'things which I wanted' should be 'things which I want' to maintain present tense consistency. Additionally, 'make least' is a typo and should be 'make a list'. The sentence structure needs correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Indeed, when I make a list what I have to shop, it's really helpful for me because I can just match my list and I can buy things which I wanted, but if I do not make least so it will be not easy for me to buy.

✓ Indeed, when I make a list of what I have to shop for, it's really helpful for me because I can just match my list and I can buy things which I want, but if I do not make a list, it will not be easy for me to buy.

The phrase 'make a list what I have to shop' requires the preposition 'of' after 'list' and 'for' after 'shop' to be grammatically correct. Prepositions are necessary to show the relationship between the list and the items to be shopped.

× Indeed, when I make a list what I have to shop, it's really helpful for me because I can just match my list and I can buy things which I wanted, but if I do not make least so it will be not easy for me to buy.

✓ Indeed, when I make a list of what I have to shop for, it's really helpful for me because I can just match my list and I can buy things which I want, but if I do not make a list, it will not be easy for me to buy.

The use of 'wanted' is incorrect because the sentence is in present tense. It should be 'want' to maintain tense consistency.

× Nowadays I am working as a PSW, so there when I work in the night shifts I usually make a list which helps me to be on the track.

✓ Nowadays I am working as a PSW, so when I work night shifts, I usually make a list which helps me to stay on track.

The phrase 'in the night shifts' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'night shifts' without 'in the'. Also, 'be on the track' should be 'stay on track' for natural English usage.

× Like in the night we have to give water to all individuals.

✓ For example, at night we have to give water to all individuals.

Starting a sentence with 'Like' is informal and can cause sentence structure issues. Using 'For example' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'in the night' is better expressed as 'at night'.

× So it's really helpful for me to remind the time and the exact. Duration.

✓ So it's really helpful for me to remember the exact time and duration.

The phrase 'to remind the time and the exact. Duration.' is fragmented and unclear. 'Remind' is incorrectly used; 'remember' is appropriate here. Also, 'exact duration' should be together, and the sentence should be complete.

× To be honest, if we have to make a list, then we need to write their things, right.

✓ To be honest, if we have to make a list, then we need to write our things, right.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect here because the subject is 'we'; it should be 'our' to maintain pronoun agreement.

× Some people's, according to my perspective, my perspective, they don't want to write things on a paper or a pen or even on the phone.

✓ Some people, according to my perspective, don't want to write things on paper or with a pen or even on the phone.

The phrase 'Some people's' is incorrect; it should be 'Some people'. Also, 'on a paper or a pen' is incorrect; it should be 'on paper or with a pen'. Repetition of 'my perspective' is unnecessary.

× So that might be a reason they don't want to make a list for them while going.

✓ So that might be a reason they don't want to make a list for themselves while going.

The phrase 'make a list for them' is unclear; it should be 'make a list for themselves' to correctly use the reflexive pronoun. Also, 'while going' is vague; however, it is acceptable in informal speech.

× Certainly when I'm going for a shopping I would make a list on the phone, not on a paper because if I have to find paper or pen it will be time consuming for me.

✓ Certainly, when I'm going shopping, I would make a list on my phone, not on paper, because if I have to find paper or a pen, it will be time-consuming for me.

The phrase 'going for a shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'going shopping'. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper' without an article. 'My phone' is more natural than 'the phone' here. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'.

× And instead of finding paper I can just use my phone and use notes, right?

✓ And instead of finding paper, I can just use my phone and use notes, right?

A comma is needed after 'finding paper' to separate clauses properly for clarity.