Part 1
考官
Do you make a list when you shop?
考生
No, I actually wanna go to a shop. I don't really just want to buy something. I just want to go like hang out with my friends. Maybe we can chat in a in a way. I usually buy something when I look at it and I decided in just a very short time.
考官
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
考生
Yeah, I would say that I usually make a list for my work, but it was it always cannot be finished when I when in the end of my work, 'cause in my first opinion I want to do everything in one day. But after that I realized that I cannot have this ability, so I just do some two to three lists.
考官
Why don't some people like making lists?
考生
Yeah, I'm the people who don't want to make a list. In my opinion, I think make a list. Just just make my life in the limitation. I don't want that. I need freedom and I prefer to do something just I decide, decide in a short time. I I don't like the schedule actually.
考官
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
考生
Well, I definitely like to make this in my phone because in my phone I can open up every, every, everywhere, anywhere and every time and when I want to look at that. But when I make the list on my on the paper, I need to bring it in in my pocket and sometimes maybe I will lose it.
Do you make a list when you shop?
分數: 65.0建議: 回答时语言不够自然,有些表达重复且不够连贯。建议简洁明了地回答问题,避免重复,并使用连接词使句子更流畅。
範例: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop because I often go shopping to hang out with my friends. I tend to buy things spontaneously when I see something I like.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
分數: 60.0建議: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构,明确表达观点,并用连接词组织内容。
範例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work, but I often can't finish everything by the end of the day. At first, I tried to do all tasks in one day, but later I realized it's better to focus on two or three important tasks.
Why don't some people like making lists?
分數: 70.0建議: 表达观点时有重复和语法错误,建议简化句子,避免重复,并用连接词使表达更连贯。
範例: I don't like making lists because I feel they limit my freedom. I prefer to decide what to do spontaneously rather than following a strict schedule.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
分數: 75.0建議: 回答较为自然,但有些重复和语法问题。建议减少重复,使用更准确的表达,并保持句子简洁。
範例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I can access them anytime and anywhere. On the other hand, paper lists can be easily lost or forgotten.
× No, I actually wanna go to a shop.
✓ No, I actually want to go to a shop.
wanna是口语缩写形式,正式书面语中应使用want to。建议使用完整形式以符合正式语境。
× I just want to go like hang out with my friends.
✓ I just want to go hang out with my friends.
go后面直接接动词原形hang out,不需要like。like在这里用法错误,建议去掉like。
× Maybe we can chat in a in a way.
✓ Maybe we can chat in a way.
句中重复了“in a”,应删除多余部分。建议注意避免重复词语。
× I usually buy something when I look at it and I decided in just a very short time.
✓ I usually buy something when I look at it and I decide in just a very short time.
句中时态不一致,前半句为一般现在时,后半句用过去时decided不合适,应改为一般现在时decide。建议保持时态一致。
× Yeah, I would say that I usually make a list for my work, but it was it always cannot be finished when I when in the end of my work, 'cause in my first opinion I want to do everything in one day.
✓ Yeah, I would say that I usually make a list for my work, but it always cannot be finished by the end of my work, because at first I want to do everything in one day.
was it always语序错误,应改为it always。when in the end of my work表达不自然,应改为by the end of my work。'cause应改为because。建议注意语序和介词使用。
× But after that I realized that I cannot have this ability, so I just do some two to three lists.
✓ But after that I realized that I cannot have this ability, so I just make two to three lists.
do some two to three lists表达不正确,应该用make lists。建议使用正确动词搭配。
× Yeah, I'm the people who don't want to make a list.
✓ Yeah, I'm one of the people who don't want to make a list.
I'm the people语法错误,主语是单数I,people是复数,需改为one of the people。建议注意主谓一致和代词使用。
× In my opinion, I think make a list. Just just make my life in the limitation.
✓ In my opinion, I think making a list just limits my life.
原句结构不完整且用词不当,make a list应改为making a list作主语,in the limitation表达不自然,应改为limits my life。建议调整句子结构和用词。
× I need freedom and I prefer to do something just I decide, decide in a short time.
✓ I need freedom and I prefer to do something that I decide in a short time.
just I decide缺少关系代词that,导致句子不完整。建议补充关系代词。
× I I don't like the schedule actually.
✓ I don't like the schedule actually.
重复使用I,属于口语中的重复,应删除多余的I。建议注意避免重复。
× Well, I definitely like to make this in my phone because in my phone I can open up every, every, everywhere, anywhere and every time and when I want to look at that.
✓ Well, I definitely like to make this on my phone because on my phone I can open it everywhere, anytime when I want to look at it.
make this in my phone应改为on my phone,open up every, every, everywhere, anywhere and every time表达重复且不规范,改为open it everywhere, anytime。建议注意介词和表达简洁。
× But when I make the list on my on the paper, I need to bring it in in my pocket and sometimes maybe I will lose it.
✓ But when I make the list on paper, I need to bring it in my pocket and sometimes I might lose it.
on my on the paper重复且不自然,应改为on paper。bring it in in my pocket重复,应改为in my pocket。maybe I will改为I might更合适。建议注意介词和词语重复。