列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa eigo no shizen-sa ga tarinai desu. Tatoeba, 'when I was at shopping' wa 'when I go shopping' ni shita hou ga ii desu. Mata, kotoba no kurikaeshi ya fukuzatsu na bunpou wa yokeru koto ga hitsuyou desu. Motto seikaku ni kotaeru tame ni, shujutsu bun (topic sentence) to shite 'I don't usually make a list when I go shopping because I have a good memory.' to iu you ni shite, tsugi ni riyuu ya jissai no rei o tsukeru to yoku narimasu.

範例: I don't usually make a list when I go shopping because I have a good memory. For example, I can remember all the items I need without writing them down, so I find it unnecessary to make a list.

建議: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, bun no tsuzuki ga warui desu. 'I don't really make the list when I work' wa 'I don't usually make a list for my work' ni shita hou ga shizen desu. Mata, riyuu o meirei ni shite, setsumei o tsukeru koto ga taisetsu desu. Kankei no aru renraku-shi o tsukatte, kotae o rikai shi yasuku shite kudasai.

範例: I don't usually make a list for my work because, as I mentioned earlier, I have a good memory. Before I start working, I try to remember all the tasks I need to do, so I find making a list unnecessary.

建議: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. 'I don't like to make some laces' wa 'Some people don't like to make lists' ni shite, imi o meirei ni shite kudasai. Mata, 'lazy' no tsukaikata ga kurikaeshi sugite, motto shizen de wakari yasui kotoba o tsukatte kudasai.

範例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel it is too much effort. They might be lazy or think that making lists is unnecessary.

建議: Kotae wa wakari yasui desu ga, kurikaeshi ya fukuzatsu na bunpou ga arimasu. 'I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is easy and so fast' wa 'I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is easy and fast' ni shite kudasai. Mata, riyuu o tsukete kotae o fukameru to yoi desu.

範例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is easy and fast. Also, I usually use my phone for many things, so it is more convenient than using paper.

× I don't make a list when I was at shopping because I I my memories is actually so good so I can memorize everything that I want to memorize.

✓ I don't make a list when I am shopping because my memory is actually so good that I can memorize everything I want to.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present and past tense ('don't make' with 'was at shopping'). The phrase 'was at shopping' is ungrammatical; the correct expression is 'am shopping' for present habitual action. Also, 'my memories is' should be 'my memory is' (singular). The correction aligns the tense and subject-verb agreement properly.

× I don't make a list when I was at shopping because I I my memories is actually so good so I can memorize everything that I want to memorize.

✓ I don't make a list when I am shopping because my memory is actually so good that I can memorize everything I want to.

The word 'memories' is plural but the intended meaning is singular 'memory' referring to the ability to remember. Also, 'is' agrees with singular 'memory'. Using 'memories' here is incorrect.

× So I don't really make the list when I was shopping and I usually buy something that like when I think.

✓ So I don't really make a list when I am shopping and I usually buy something when I think of it.

The phrase 'when I was shopping' should be 'when I am shopping' to match the present habitual tense. Also, 'something that like when I think' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'something when I think of it' to express the intended meaning.

× I don't really make the list when I work because I don't I'm as I mentioned earlier, my my memory is quite good and I can memorize what I needed.

✓ I don't really make a list when I work because, as I mentioned earlier, my memory is quite good and I can memorize what I need.

'Make the list' should be 'make a list' as it is a general statement. 'What I needed' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'what I need'.

× So before before I go to work, go to the work.

✓ So before I go to work.

The phrase 'go to the work' is incorrect; 'work' as an uncountable noun does not require 'the'. The repetition 'before before' is also removed.

× I don't like to make some laces because I'm lazy.

✓ I don't like to make some lists because I'm lazy.

The word 'laces' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'lists'. 'Laces' refers to shoelaces, which is unrelated.

× And I think someone who doesn't like to make the list also lazy.

✓ And I think someone who doesn't like to make lists is also lazy.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'also lazy'. Also, 'the list' should be plural 'lists' to generalize the statement.

× So they just they think it's it's just lazy and they don't, they think they don't have to, they say because they had, I think they had I think.

✓ So they just think it's lazy and they don't think they have to make a list.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. The correction simplifies and clarifies the intended meaning.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is easy and so fast to make a list on my phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is easy and very fast to make a list on my phone.

The phrase 'so fast' is better expressed as 'very fast' for clarity and correctness.

× In addition, I have I usually use my phone and everything, but not on paper.

✓ In addition, I usually use my phone for everything, but not paper.

The phrase 'I have I usually use' is incorrect and redundant. 'Use my phone and everything' is vague; corrected to 'use my phone for everything'. Also, 'but not on paper' is better as 'but not paper' to contrast usage mediums.