列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ немного неестественный и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует избегать избыточности и сделать ответ более связным и кратким. Например, можно начать с прямого ответа, а затем добавить причину с использованием связующих слов.

範例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list when I plan to cook because it helps me remember all the ingredients I need.

建議: Ответ содержит повторения и нечеткую структуру, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова и избегать повторов, а также строить предложение логично и ясно.

範例: Yes, I often make lists for my study and work because they help me concentrate better and organize my tasks efficiently.

建議: Ответ слишком длинный и немного запутанный из-за повторений и нечетких выражений. Следует использовать более точные формулировки и связующие слова для логичности.

範例: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they find the process slow and boring, and it depends on personal preferences.

建議: Ответ хороший, но можно сделать его более естественным и связным, используя подходящие связующие слова и избегая повторов.

範例: Honestly, I prefer making lists on my phone because it gives me flexibility; for example, I can quickly edit tasks, which is very convenient.

× I usually make a list for my shopping when I am going to cook some dishes because it is really convenient way to not forget.

✓ I usually make a list for my shopping when I am going to cook some dishes because it is a really convenient way to not forget.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'really convenient way'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article. Here, 'way' is a singular countable noun and needs 'a' before it.

× What products do you need for your cooking and dishes?

✓ What products do you need for your cooking?

The phrase 'your cooking and dishes' is awkward and redundant. 'Dishes' is unnecessary here because 'cooking' already implies preparing food. Simplifying to 'your cooking' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× I think I often make some planned lists for my study and work because it is much easier when you have planned planned lists for your studying and work because work because it helps me to concentrate more for my studying and. Sometimes.

✓ I think I often make planned lists for my study and work because it is much easier when you have planned lists for your studying and work since it helps me concentrate more on my studying sometimes.

The sentence has repetition ('planned planned'), unnecessary use of 'some' with plural countable noun 'lists' which is acceptable but can be omitted for clarity, and awkward phrasing. Also, 'concentrate more for my studying' should be 'concentrate more on my studying'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× In my opinion, so many people don't like making a list for their study and work because they don't like the whole process of it, because it can be really slow and dull and it really can depend on the people in the wrong way.

✓ In my opinion, many people don't like making a list for their study and work because they don't like the whole process; it can be really slow and dull, and it really depends on the person.

The phrase 'so many people' is informal; 'many people' is more appropriate here. 'It really can depend on the people in the wrong way' is awkward and unclear; corrected to 'it really depends on the person' for clarity and correctness. Also, sentence structure improved for readability.

× Honestly, I prefer making lists on my phone because it improves my flexibility and for example I can edit all the tasks in the short time and it is really convenient for me to make it in the phone.

✓ Honestly, I prefer making lists on my phone because it improves my flexibility; for example, I can edit all the tasks in a short time, and it is really convenient for me to make them on the phone.

The phrase 'in the short time' should be 'in a short time'. Also, 'make it in the phone' is incorrect; it should be 'make them on the phone' because 'lists' is plural and the preposition for devices is 'on'. The sentence is corrected for preposition and pronoun use.