列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh" và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn hơn, tránh lặp lại ý. Bạn cũng nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me avoid impulse buying. By following the list, I stay focused and buy only what I need, which makes my shopping more efficient.

建議: Bạn trả lời rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt, tuy nhiên câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn hơn và sử dụng từ nối để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "like sometimes" mà nên dùng "sometimes" hoặc "I sometimes".

範例: Sometimes I make a work list because it helps me prioritize important tasks. This way, I can complete my work more efficiently and improve my productivity.

建議: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như "umm" và "you know" để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ, bạn nên luyện tập để câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và chính xác hơn.

範例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous and follow their feelings. This approach helps them feel more relaxed and flexible in their daily activities.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: It's hard to choose, but I prefer making lists on paper because writing by hand helps me remember things better. Also, I find it more relaxing than using my phone.

× Yeah, of course is an essential thing.

✓ Yeah, of course it is an essential thing.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before the verb 'is'. In English, sentences require a subject to be complete. Adding 'it' corrects the sentence structure.

× By arranging a list, I can't avoid, uh, impulse purchasing when shopping.

✓ By arranging a list, I can avoid, uh, impulse purchasing when shopping.

The modal verb 'can't' contradicts the intended meaning. The speaker means that arranging a list helps to avoid impulse buying, so 'can' is the correct modal verb here.

× By sticking to the plan, I will never be distracted by unnecessary items, so my shopping will be more efficient.

✓ By sticking to the plan, I will not be distracted by unnecessary items, so my shopping will be more efficient.

Using 'never' in this context is less natural than 'not'. 'Will not' is more appropriate to express the future negative action.

× Like sometimes I do so because when arranging a work list, I can prioritize the most important thing and do it first.

✓ Sometimes I do because when arranging a work list, I can prioritize the most important things and do them first.

'Like' is unnecessary here and 'thing' should be plural 'things' because multiple tasks are implied. Also, 'do it first' should be 'do them first' to agree with the plural subject.

× By doing so, my work is done more efficiently and therefore enhancing my productivity at work.

✓ By doing so, my work is done more efficiently and therefore my productivity at work is enhanced.

The sentence lacks a subject for 'enhancing'. Changing it to 'my productivity at work is enhanced' corrects the sentence structure.

× Umm, you know, some people just don't enjoy making a list because they want to really want to go with the flow and follow their feelings.

✓ Umm, you know, some people just don't enjoy making a list because they really want to go with the flow and follow their feelings.

The phrase 'want to really want to' is redundant. Removing the extra 'want to' corrects the sentence.

× They just want to do the things they feel right at that moment instead of plan everything in advance.

✓ They just want to do the things they feel are right at that moment instead of planning everything in advance.

The verb 'feel' needs a complement 'are' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'plan' should be in gerund form 'planning' after 'instead of'.

× But this way they will get more relaxed and spontaneous.

✓ But this way, they will be more relaxed and spontaneous.

The verb 'get' is less appropriate here; 'be' is better to describe a state. Also, a comma after 'way' improves clarity.

× More hard to choose.

✓ It's harder to choose.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'It's' and changing 'more hard' to 'harder' corrects the sentence.

× I would go with on paper by doing I, I.

✓ I would go with paper because, I, I...

The phrase 'go with on paper by doing I, I' is ungrammatical and unclear. Changing to 'go with paper because' is clearer, though the hesitation 'I, I' remains as speech filler.

× I really like the feelings of jotting something down by hands, but this way I can enhance my memory.

✓ I really like the feeling of jotting something down by hand, and this way I can enhance my memory.

'Feelings' should be singular 'feeling' here. 'By hands' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'by hand'. Also, 'but' is better replaced with 'and' to connect the ideas logically.

× I can't remember things more efficiently when go shopping and I find the traditional way is more relaxed compared to using my phone.

✓ I can't remember things as efficiently when I go shopping, and I find the traditional way is more relaxing compared to using my phone.

The verb 'go' needs the subject 'I'. 'More efficiently' should be 'as efficiently' to compare properly. 'More relaxed' should be 'more relaxing' to describe the method.