列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you make a list, and how you do it, keeping it concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I usually make a list before shopping because I tend to forget items easily. Therefore, I write the list on the notes app on my mobile phone, which helps me save time and stay organized.

建議: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain how the list helps you. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary to describe your study routine.

範例: Yes, as a scholar, I make a timetable listing which subjects or lessons to study at specific times. This method has helped me study more effectively and stay organized.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve coherence by using linking words. Express your opinion clearly and provide reasons with appropriate vocabulary.

範例: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they find it boring and believe it wastes time. As a result, they prefer not to make lists.

建議: Improve sentence flow by using linking words and clearer expressions. Avoid awkward phrasing and be specific about the advantages of using a phone for lists.

範例: In today's modern world, technology is very important. Therefore, I prefer to make lists on my mobile phone because it saves time and I don't have to worry about losing paper lists.

× I usually go when I go go for a shopping I make a list of items which I have to buy because I I I forgot the things very easily so it saves my times while doing shopping.

✓ I usually go shopping, and I make a list of items that I have to buy because I forget things very easily, so it saves my time while shopping.

The original sentence has repetition ('go go'), incorrect article usage ('a shopping' should be 'shopping'), and tense inconsistency ('forgot' should be 'forget' to match present tense). Also, 'times' should be singular 'time' as it refers to an uncountable noun here. The sentence is corrected to improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So I write the items on my application on mobile phone notes.

✓ So I write the items in the notes application on my mobile phone.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used twice. The correct preposition for writing inside an application is 'in'. Also, the phrase is reordered for natural English expression.

× For my work note as I am a scholar, I make a list of my timetable to study which subject or which lesson at which time which helped me a lot and it it helped me to study in manner way.

✓ For my work notes, as I am a scholar, I make a timetable listing which subject or lesson to study at which time, which has helped me a lot and helped me to study in an organized way.

The phrase 'work note' should be plural 'work notes' to match the context. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, including article usage ('an organized way').

× According to me, people find it it very boring work but and also they find that it is a wastage of time of making the list.

✓ According to me, people find it very boring work, and they also find that making a list is a waste of time.

The sentence has repeated words ('it it'), unnecessary conjunctions ('but and also'), and awkward phrasing ('wastage of time of making the list'). The pronoun usage is corrected for clarity and natural expression.

× So they don't prefer them. They don't prefer to make a list.

✓ So they don't prefer it. They don't prefer to make a list.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect here because it refers to plural objects, but 'making a list' is singular. 'It' is the correct pronoun to refer to the activity of making a list.

× As in a modern world, technology plays a crucial role and spread it all over the world.

✓ In the modern world, technology plays a crucial role and has spread all over the world.

The phrase 'As in a modern world' is incorrect; it should be 'In the modern world'. Also, 'spread it all over the world' is incorrect; 'has spread all over the world' is the correct form.

× So I decided to make a list on my mobile phone as it saves my time a lot or it does not fear of losing a list which is written on a paper.

✓ So I decided to make a list on my mobile phone as it saves me a lot of time and there is no fear of losing a list written on paper.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'I' in 'saves my time' (should be 'saves me time'). Also, 'does not fear' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'there is no fear'. The sentence is corrected for natural and grammatically correct expression.