列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Tapai ko uttar ma thap clarity ra grammar sudhar garnu parcha. 'stop' ko sato 'shop' bhannu parcha ra 'prevent' lai 'prevents' garnu parcha. Sentence haru lai thap natural ra concise banau, jasma linking words pani samet hoss.

範例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because I find it very convenient and efficient. It prevents me from making impulsive decisions. Moreover, by making a list, I can save both time and money, which makes my shopping experience more enjoyable.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma thap coherence ra grammar sudhar garnu parcha. 'make a list from my work' ko sato 'make a list for my work' bhannu parcha. 'uh' jasto filler words hataunu parcha. Linking words jastai 'therefore' ya 'so' ko prayog garnu ramro hunchha.

範例: I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay focused and organized. Therefore, I can finish my tasks before the deadline, which creates a good impression on my colleagues and supervisor.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma repetition ra grammar ko samasya cha. 'restriction' ko thau ma 'restrictions' plural use garnu parcha. Sentence haru lai concise ra natural banau, ra thap vivid vocabulary prayog garnu parcha.

範例: Some people dislike making lists because they find them restrictive. They prefer to shop freely according to their desires without any limitations, which gives them a sense of freedom.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma grammar ra word order ma sudhar garnu parcha. 'more much more' ko sato 'much more' bhannu parcha. 'much more easier' ko sato 'much easier' bhannu parcha. Sentence haru lai concise ra natural banau.

範例: I always prefer to make lists on my phone because we carry it everywhere in this digital era. It is much more convenient than paper since we can easily lose paper, but we keep our phones safe and always with us, making it easier to access our lists.

× It prevent me from taking impulsive decision as well.

✓ It prevents me from taking impulsive decisions as well.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verb should be 'prevents' to agree in number. Also, 'decision' should be plural 'decisions' because 'impulsive decisions' is the correct plural form here.

× It prevent me from taking impulsive decision as well.

✓ It prevents me from taking impulsive decisions as well.

The noun 'decision' should be plural 'decisions' because it refers to multiple instances of impulsive choices, which is more natural in this context.

× By making a list I can save my time and money.

✓ By making a list I can save time and money.

The phrase 'my time' is less common; generally, 'time' is used without a possessive in this context to express saving time in general.

× As I always make a list from my work, it helps me to stay focused and organized.

✓ As I always make a list for my work, it helps me to stay focused and organized.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'make a list for my work' is the correct phrase to indicate purpose.

× As I always make a list from my work, it helps me to stay focused and organized.

✓ As I always make a list for my work, it helps me to stay focused and organized.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect; 'for' is the correct preposition to indicate the purpose of making a list.

× So whenever I make a list of tasks, I can finish it before deadline uh, which helps to create a good impression of mine on my colleagues or my supervisor.

✓ So whenever I make a list of tasks, I can finish them before the deadline, which helps to create a good impression on my colleagues or my supervisor.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'tasks'. Also, 'deadline' needs the definite article 'the' before it. 'Impression of mine' is better expressed as 'impression' without 'of mine'.

× which helps to create a good impression of mine on my colleagues or my supervisor.

✓ which helps to create a good impression on my colleagues or my supervisor.

The phrase 'impression of mine' is awkward; the correct expression is 'impression on' someone.

× They might have a habit to buy or purchase things according to their will without any restriction.

✓ They might have a habit of buying or purchasing things according to their will without any restriction.

The correct phrase is 'have a habit of' followed by a gerund ('buying'), not 'have a habit to'.

× They might have a habit to buy or purchase things according to their will without any restriction.

✓ They might have a habit of buying or purchasing things according to their will without any restriction.

After 'have a habit of', the verb should be in the '-ing' form (gerund), so 'buying' and 'purchasing' are correct.

× They might find freedom on purchasing things without the restriction.

✓ They might find freedom in purchasing things without restriction.

The correct preposition is 'in' when expressing 'find freedom in something'. Also, 'the restriction' should be 'restriction' without 'the'.

× They might find freedom on purchasing things without the restriction.

✓ They might find freedom in purchasing things without restriction.

Use 'in' instead of 'on' with 'find freedom'. Also, 'restriction' is uncountable here and does not need 'the'.

× This is the digital era, so everywhere we go, we carry phone with us and it is more much more convenient than carrying a paper.

✓ This is the digital era, so everywhere we go, we carry a phone with us and it is much more convenient than carrying paper.

'Phone' needs the article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. 'More much more' is redundant; only 'much more' is correct. Also, 'carrying a paper' is incorrect; 'carrying paper' is better as 'paper' is uncountable here.

× This is the digital era, so everywhere we go, we carry phone with us and it is more much more convenient than carrying a paper.

✓ This is the digital era, so everywhere we go, we carry a phone with us and it is much more convenient than carrying paper.

The singular countable noun 'phone' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'paper' is uncountable and does not need an article here.

× We might lose a paper somewhere but we keep our phone with full safety and we are aware of our phone, so it is much more easier.

✓ We might lose paper somewhere, but we keep our phone safely and are aware of it, so it is much easier.

'With full safety' is awkward; 'safely' is the correct adverb. 'Much more easier' is incorrect; 'much easier' is correct. Also, 'aware of our phone' is better as 'aware of it' to avoid repetition.