列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "make a list on there" and "make a listing of mobile phone." Use linking words to improve coherence. For example, you can say, "Yes, I usually make a list on my phone because it helps me remember everything I need to buy, and it's very convenient."

範例: Yes, I usually make a list on my phone because it helps me remember everything I need to buy, and it's very convenient.

建議: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammatical errors. Try to speak more clearly and directly. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say, "Yes, I definitely make a list on my phone to remember all my tasks. It helps me stay organized and complete my work on time."

範例: Yes, I definitely make a list on my phone to remember all my tasks. It helps me stay organized and complete my work on time.

建議: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using correct grammar and adding linking words. For example, say, "Some people don't like making lists because they think it takes too much time and can be inconvenient. Moreover, they feel it slows them down and interrupts their flow."

範例: Some people don't like making lists because they think it takes too much time and can be inconvenient. Moreover, they feel it slows them down and interrupts their flow.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Avoid repetition and use linking words. For example, say, "I prefer making lists on my phone because it is easy to carry and safe. Also, I can easily edit the list and share it with my friends."

範例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is easy to carry and safe. Also, I can easily edit the list and share it with my friends.

× It is more convenient to make a listing of mobile phone.

✓ It is more convenient to make a list on a mobile phone.

The word 'listing' is incorrectly used here; the correct noun is 'list'. Also, the preposition 'of' is incorrect; 'on' is appropriate when referring to making a list using a device. Additionally, 'mobile phone' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Yes, definitely. I made him.

✓ Yes, definitely. I made one.

The phrase 'I made him' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student intended to say 'I made one' referring to a list. The pronoun 'him' is incorrect here.

× I made I made a list in my phone so that I can remember is and everything that I need to do over and over and I do not deviate it from my own work.

✓ I made a list on my phone so that I can remember everything I need to do repeatedly and not deviate from my work.

The sentence has repetition ('I made I made'), incorrect preposition ('in' should be 'on' for phone), unnecessary word 'is', and awkward phrasing. The correction improves clarity and grammar.

× It helped me to be do we stay organized and do the work in time.

✓ It helped me to stay organized and do the work on time.

The phrase 'to be do we stay' is incorrect and confusing. The correct form is 'to stay'. Also, 'in time' is better expressed as 'on time' when referring to completing work punctually.

× Some people think that making a list take up too much time and can be inconvenient.

✓ Some people think that making a list takes up too much time and can be inconvenient.

The subject 'making a list' is singular, so the verb should be 'takes' instead of 'take' to agree in number.

× They think that making list slow them down and interrupt their flow.

✓ They think that making a list slows them down and interrupts their flow.

'Making list' is missing the article 'a'. Also, the verbs 'slow' and 'interrupt' should be in singular form 'slows' and 'interrupts' to agree with the singular subject 'making a list'.

× I'd like to make a list on our phone because it is more easy to carry anywhere, yeah, and is safe.

✓ I'd like to make a list on my phone because it is easier to carry anywhere and is safe.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect if referring to the student's own phone; 'my' is appropriate. Also, 'more easy' should be 'easier' as the comparative form of 'easy'.

× We can easily realize an edit anything in our list if you use in our phone.

✓ We can easily realize and edit anything in our list if we use our phone.

The sentence has pronoun inconsistency: 'you' should be 'we' to match the subject. Also, 'realize' is likely a misuse; possibly 'review' or 'access' is intended, but as per instruction, only grammar issues are corrected. The preposition 'in' before 'our phone' is unnecessary.

× And we can also see a rate to our friends.

✓ And we can also share it with our friends.

The phrase 'see a rate to our friends' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the student meant 'share it with our friends'. This correction addresses pronoun and word choice issues.

× So I like, I prefer. For mobile phone over writing on a paper.

✓ So I like and prefer using a mobile phone over writing on paper.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. The correction combines the ideas into a complete sentence with proper structure. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper'.