列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сіздің жауабыңызда сөйлемдер арасында байланыс аз және кейбір сөйлемдер мағынасыз немесе қайталанатын. Жауапты қысқа әрі нақты етіп, негізгі ойды анық жеткізуге тырысыңыз. Мысалы, "I don't usually make a shopping list because I find it time-consuming and unnecessary."

範例: I don't usually make a shopping list because I find it time-consuming and unnecessary. Instead, I prefer to buy items spontaneously based on what I need at the moment.

建議: Жауабыңызда сөйлемдер түсініксіз және байланыссыз. Сұраққа нақты жауап беріп, қосымша ақпаратты логикалық түрде жеткізіңіз. Мысалы, "I don't usually make lists for work, but I know they can help organize tasks better."

範例: I don't usually make lists for work, but I know they can help organize tasks better. Sometimes, I try to write down important points, but I prefer to keep things in my mind.

建議: Жауабыңызда қайталанатын сөздер мен сөйлемдер бар. Ойыңызды нақты және қысқа жеткізіңіз, сөйлемдерді байланыстыру үшін дұрыс сөздерді қолданыңыз. Мысалы, "Some people find making lists annoying and time-consuming, so they avoid it."

範例: Some people find making lists annoying and time-consuming, so they avoid it. They may prefer to remember tasks mentally rather than writing them down.

建議: Жауабыңызда жақсы ой бар, бірақ сөйлемдер ұзақ және кейбір жерлерде қайталанады. Қысқа әрі нақты сөйлемдермен жауап беріп, байланыстыру сөздерін қолданыңыз. Мысалы, "I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient and always with me."

範例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient and always with me. Using apps helps me organize tasks efficiently and update them anytime.

× making a list is wasting the time for me

✓ making a list wastes time for me

The phrase 'is wasting' is incorrectly used here. Instead, the simple present tense 'wastes' should be used to express a general truth or habit. Also, 'the time' is unnecessary; 'time' is uncountable here.

× Therefore making a list is annoying. For me.

✓ Therefore, making a list is annoying for me.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. Combining the two parts into one sentence with proper commas improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Therefore, I'm never a medalist yet.

✓ Therefore, I have never been a medalist yet.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Using the present perfect tense 'have never been' correctly expresses the idea of not having achieved the status up to now.

× making a list and might be very useful for a lot of people

✓ making a list might be very useful for a lot of people

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly placed before 'might'. It should be removed to correctly express possibility with the modal verb 'might'.

× For the more.

✓ Moreover,

'For the more' is incorrect and unclear. The correct transitional adverb 'Moreover' should be used to add information.

× It assists to me sometimes, however I never make a list.

✓ It assists me sometimes; however, I never make a list.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary after 'assists'. Also, a semicolon or period should separate the two independent clauses for clarity.

× In my opinion. Making a list might be a little annoying for some people, therefore I consider they don't like making a list plus making a list.

✓ In my opinion, making a list might be a little annoying for some people; therefore, I think they don't like making lists.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Combining the fragments properly and avoiding repetition improves clarity and correctness.

× making a list plus making a list. Is wasting the time for some people

✓ making a list wastes time for some people

Repetition is unnecessary. Also, 'Is wasting the time' is incorrect; the simple present 'wastes time' is appropriate here.

× therefore they're not passionate about making a list.

✓ therefore they are not passionate about making lists.

Using the contraction 'they're' is acceptable, but expanding it improves formality. Also, 'making lists' plural is more natural when speaking generally.

× I am keen on and making a list on my phone

✓ I am keen on making a list on my phone

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly inserted and should be removed to maintain correct sentence structure.

× Therefore, it's very useful using this smart phone.

✓ Therefore, it's very useful to use this smartphone.

The gerund 'using' is less appropriate here; the infinitive 'to use' is better after 'useful'. Also, 'smartphone' is one word.