唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say why it makes you happy and give a brief example.

範例: Yes, I love singing because it relaxes me and boosts my confidence. For example, when I was a child my teacher encouraged me to sing in front of the class, which helped me overcome stage fright. Now I enjoy singing with my children while I play the guitar, which makes family time more enjoyable.

建議: Use correct past tense forms and link ideas coherently. Begin with a direct answer, then add specific details about what you learned and why it mattered, using linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

範例: Yes, I learned to sing at university with a vocal trainer. For example, she taught me breath control and phrasing, and because she was a jazz singer I also learned how to add expression to songs. This experience impressed me and improved my technique.

建議: Clarify meaning and correct word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence (who you sing for), then explain with one or two specific reasons and an example, using linking words like 'however' or 'also'. Avoid vague phrases.

範例: I usually sing for myself because singing is a personal, enjoyable hobby. However, I also like to sing with my children sometimes, because those moments are fun and we can share good feelings as a family.

建議: Be natural and vary sentence structure. Give a clear opinion, then support it with a specific example and a linking word such as 'for instance' or 'especially'. Avoid repeating the same word at the start of sentences.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness, especially when it is done in a group. For instance, singing with friends at church creates a joyful atmosphere where we can share feelings and connect emotionally.

建議: Improve grammar and vocabulary. Answer directly, then explain why with a clear example. Use correct verb forms and choose words like 'interpretation' instead of 'interruption'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because their interpretation can reveal different emotions in a song. For example, a singer's tone and phrasing can make the same lyrics sound more hopeful or more melancholic.

建議: Use accurate grammar and organise ideas: state when you took classes, whether they were mandatory, then give specific things you learned using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I took a singing class when I was a student because it was a required subject. I enjoyed it because I learned about music theory and how to use my voice with different instruments, and I also liked practicing songs with my classmates.

× When I was a child, my teacher plays my singing adversity, my confidence.

✓ When I was a child, my teacher damaged my singing confidence.

The verb 'plays' is incorrect for third person singular in this context and the whole phrasing is ungrammatical. 'Plays' should be a past tense verb matching 'was' (child) and the intended meaning is that the teacher harmed confidence. Use past tense 'damaged' for a completed action in the past and correct the noun phrase to 'singing confidence'. Suggestion: use simple past for past events and choose verbs that match intended meaning.

× I learned how to sing by voice trainer.

✓ I learned how to sing from a voice trainer.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; use 'from' to indicate the person who taught you. Also 'voice trainer' needs an article 'a'. No past participle change needed; main error is preposition and article. Suggestion: use 'from' and include 'a' before occupations.

× It was a very good moment.

✓ It was a very good experience.

While grammatically possible, 'moment' is awkward; 'experience' better matches learning context. This is a style/word choice issue improving clarity. Suggestion: choose nouns that fit the context.

× She was very kind and showed how to sing a song in detail.

✓ She was very kind and showed me how to sing a song in detail.

The verb 'showed' usually takes an object; the indirect object 'me' is missing. Add the pronoun to indicate who was taught. Suggestion: include the recipient after verbs like 'showed'.

× She was a jazz singer and it was very impressed to me.

✓ She was a jazz singer and I was very impressed.

'Impressed' describes the speaker's feeling and should be used with subject 'I' plus 'was'. The original uses passive-like structure 'it was very impressed to me' which is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'I was impressed' or 'it impressed me'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is fine as asked by the examiner; no change needed. No error per provided list.

× I just want to sing for myself.

✓ I just want to sing for myself.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× Adjust singing is my fun activity.

✓ Casual singing is my fun activity.

'Adjust' is incorrect; likely intended 'just' or 'casual'. If meaning is 'for myself' then 'casual singing' or 'singing as a hobby' fits. Suggestion: use 'casual singing' or 'singing is my hobby'.

× I don't need to sing for someone.

✓ I don't need to sing for anyone.

Use 'anyone' instead of 'someone' in negative sentences. In negatives, 'anyone' is the standard choice. Suggestion: use 'anyone' with negative verbs.

× But I also like to see with the children.

✓ But I also like to sing with the children.

'See with' is incorrect; context implies singing together, so use 'sing with'. Verb choice and preposition were wrong. Suggestion: ensure verb matches intended action.

× It can be very fun moment and then we can share the a good feeling.

✓ It can be a very fun moment and then we can share a good feeling.

Missing article before 'very fun moment' (need 'a') and extra 'the' before 'a good feeling'. Use 'a' for singular count nouns and avoid redundant articles. Suggestion: review article rules for singular countable nouns.

× Yeah, I truly think so.

✓ Yeah, I truly think so.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× Especially a singing with other people bring happiness to us.

✓ Especially singing with other people brings happiness to us.

Remove the article 'a' before 'singing' (singing as a gerund doesn't take 'a') and use third person singular 'brings' to agree with the singular gerund subject. Suggestion: treat gerunds as singular nouns and match verb accordingly.

× Especially when I sing with my friends at church, it's a very fun moment for us.

✓ Especially when I sing with my friends at church, it's a very fun moment for us.

Sentence is acceptable; no grammatical change required. 'It's' correctly refers to 'a very fun moment'.

× We can share our feelings and thoughts.

✓ We can share our feelings and thoughts.

Correct sentence; no change needed.

× Do you like listening to others singing?

✓ Do you like listening to others sing?

Use the bare infinitive 'sing' after verbs of perception or with 'listen to' when followed by 'others': 'listening to others sing' is more natural than 'others singing' here, though both are possible. Suggestion: use 'listen to others sing' for clarity.

× Yeah, I really love listening to and singing.

✓ Yeah, I really love listening and singing.

Remove 'to' after 'listening' when coordinating with another gerund; 'listening and singing' is parallel. Suggestion: keep parallel structure in coordinated verbs.

× Yeah, it providing you insight about the song because how to sing can express the interruption of the song.

✓ Yeah, it provides insight into the song because the way someone sings can express the interpretation of the song.

Multiple errors: verb form 'providing' should be 'provides' (present tense third person), wrong preposition 'about' should be 'into', 'how to sing' is awkward—use 'the way someone sings', and 'interruption' is incorrect word; intended 'interpretation'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose correct nouns.

× Have you ever taken a singing class?

✓ Have you ever taken a singing class?

Question is correct; no change needed.

× Yes, when I was a student taking our singing class is a mandatory subject.

✓ Yes, when I was a student, our singing class was a mandatory subject.

The clause order and tense were wrong. Use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a student' and place commas for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and proper clause order.

× I really enjoyed them as sure singing class I could run a lot of things about music and instruments.

✓ I really enjoyed it because in the singing class I learned a lot about music and instruments.

Pronoun 'them' should be 'it' (class is singular), and phrase 'as sure singing class I could run a lot of things' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'because in the singing class I learned a lot'. Suggestion: use 'learned' for acquiring knowledge and match pronouns to noun number.

× And I also love to sing with my friends.

✓ And I also love to sing with my friends.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.