唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免重复和语法错误，如“more than sing”应为“more than singing”。回答应更自然流畅，避免多余的填充词“Umm”。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连词连接句子。

範例: I prefer listening to music rather than singing because it relaxes me. When I was younger, I enjoyed going to karaoke with my friends since it was very fun. However, nowadays I don't have much time to sing.

建議: 回答中存在语法和表达不完整的问题，如“made me”后面缺少内容。应避免重复表达“一周一次课程”，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing in elementary school during our weekly music classes. Although it was only one lesson per week, I really enjoyed it because it helped me improve my voice and confidence.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“really enjoying”应为“really enjoys”，“TomTom the Piper Sand”应为正确歌曲名。句子结构混乱，建议使用连词并注意语法准确。

範例: I want to sing for my son because he really enjoys listening to me. He especially likes children's songs such as "Tom, Tom, the Piper's Son," which make him happy and want to dance. Singing for him is a wonderful experience.

建議: 回答中有许多填充词“umm”“uh”，影响流畅度。表达不清楚，如“he can film very happy and exciting”不合语法。建议简洁表达观点，使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

範例: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I sing to my son, he feels very happy and excited, and he always dances along.

× Actually, I prefer listening to music more than sing.

✓ Actually, I prefer listening to music more than singing.

动词prefer后面接动名词形式，不能用原形动词。这里应该用singing代替sing。

× When I was young I really enjoyed the scene karaoke with my friend because it's very fun.

✓ When I was young I really enjoyed the karaoke scene with my friends because it was very fun.

scene karaoke的词序错误，应为karaoke scene；friend应为复数friends，因为通常是和多个朋友一起唱卡拉OK；时态应与过去时间一致，it is改为it was。

× However, nowadays I don't have too much time to to sing and excel.

✓ However, nowadays I don't have too much time to sing and excel.

这里多了一个to，应删除一个to。

× Yes, I have learned how to sing. In my elementary school we had music class once a week uh where I learned how to sing.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing. In my elementary school, we had music class once a week where I learned how to sing.

句子中“uh”是口语填充词，应去除或用逗号隔开。

× Although it was only one person per week, 1 lesson per week.

✓ Although there was only one lesson per week.

原句表达不清，应该用one lesson per week来表达每周一节课。

× I really enjoyed it because it helped me improve my voice and made me.

✓ I really enjoyed it because it helped me improve my voice and made me happy.

句子不完整，made me后面缺少宾语，需补充形容词happy。

× Of course, I want to sing for my son because he really enjoying listening to me.

✓ Of course, I want to sing for my son because he really enjoys listening to me.

主语he后动词应用第三人称单数形式enjoys，不能用现在分词enjoying。

× He especially like children's songs such as TomTom the Piper Sand, which makes him happy and dancing with the sun.

✓ He especially likes children's songs such as TomTom the Piper's Sand, which make him happy and dance with the sun.

主语he后动词应用第三人称单数likes；which指代复数songs，谓语动词应为make；and后动词应为原形dance。

× Seeing for him is a wonderful thing.

✓ Singing for him is a wonderful thing.

原句中的Seeing应为Singing，意思是“为他唱歌是一件美好的事”。

× Of course, umm, especially when I see UMM for my son, he really enjoys it because uh, when I sing a song, he can film very happy and exciting and he always dances.

✓ Of course, umm, especially when I sing for my son, he really enjoys it because, when I sing a song, he feels very happy and excited and he always dances.

see UMM应为sing for；film应为feels；exciting应为形容人的形容词excited。