唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant but lacks coherence and contains some incomplete sentences. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, keep your sentences complete and clear. For example, instead of 'Even though I am not a professional. Similar,' you could say 'Although I am not a professional singer, I find music very therapeutic and uplifting.'

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax when I feel stressed. Although I am not a professional singer, humming my favorite songs lifts my mood. Moreover, music is a therapeutic way to unwind after a busy day, especially in today's stressful world.

建議: Your answer needs better structure and clarity. Avoid short, incomplete sentences like 'Just perform.' Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons. Also, try to express your feelings more clearly and confidently.

範例: No, I have never formally learned to sing because I lack confidence in my ability. However, I enjoy practising songs alone at home and imitating famous singers. I believe singing is a great way to relieve stress, but I prefer to sing privately since I am afraid others might judge my voice.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Avoid unfinished sentences like 'especially since she is one person who always.' Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you want to sing for your mother. Make sure your sentences are complete and clear.

範例: I would love to sing a song for my mother on Mother's Day because she has worked hard to raise us alone. She always encourages us to stay focused and dedicated. Moreover, she is very supportive and never judges me, so singing for her would be a special way to show my gratitude and love.

建議: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear sentences. Avoid repetition like 'I think thinking.' Use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Also, explain your points clearly with specific examples or reasons.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because people express their emotions differently. For example, introverted people who find it hard to share feelings can use singing to communicate their emotions. Therefore, singing is a wonderful way to spread happiness and enjoy special moments.

× Even though I am not a professional.

✓ Even though I am not a professional,

This sentence is a fragment because it lacks a main clause. It should be connected to the following sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× Similar, I think music is very therapeutic and uplifting way to unwind after a long day.

✓ Similarly, I think music is a very therapeutic and uplifting way to unwind after a long day.

The word 'Similar' is incorrectly used; the correct adverb is 'Similarly'. Also, 'uplifting way' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Uh, as in today's busy world we all feel stressed, some music is a way to get relief from that.

✓ Uh, in today's busy world, we all feel stressed; music is a way to get relief from that.

The sentence is awkward and incorrectly structured. 'As in' is unnecessary, and the sentence should be split or connected properly for clarity.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past tense form; 'learned' is preferred in American English. Both are correct but consistency is important.

× Just perform.

✓ I just perform.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'I' makes it a complete sentence.

× I believe singing can be great way to relieve stress for people who know how to sing.

✓ I believe singing can be a great way to relieve stress for people who know how to sing.

The phrase 'great way' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× Even though I only sing privately, since I'm not a confident enough to perform in front of others, I think they make fun of my voice.

✓ Even though I only sing privately, since I'm not confident enough to perform in front of others, I think they make fun of my voice.

The word 'a' before 'confident' is incorrect because 'confident' is an adjective and does not need an article.

× She has always taught us to be focused and dedicated to our goals, and she's the only one person who will not pass a judgmental statement on my singing and I believe she is a great asset to our family and society.

✓ She has always taught us to be focused and dedicated to our goals, and she's the only person who will not pass a judgmental statement on my singing, and I believe she is a great asset to our family and society.

The phrase 'only one person' is incorrect; 'only person' is the correct form. Also, a comma is needed before 'and I believe' to separate clauses.

× Singing for her would be a way to show my gratitude and love, especially since she is one person who always.

✓ Singing for her would be a way to show my gratitude and love, especially since she is one person who always supports me.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly; it needs completion to convey the intended meaning.

× Some people are introvert, others are extroverts.

✓ Some people are introverts, others are extroverts.

'Introvert' should be plural 'introverts' to match 'others are extroverts' and maintain parallel structure.

× So far introvert people who are not able to express their feelings.

✓ So far, introverted people are not able to express their feelings.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb; adding 'are' and changing 'introvert' to 'introverted' corrects it.

× I think thinking is a great medium to spread happiness and they can represent their emotions in the form of music to their special ones.

✓ I think singing is a great medium to spread happiness and people can represent their emotions in the form of music to their special ones.

'Thinking' is incorrect here; it should be 'singing'. Also, 'they' is vague; replacing with 'people' clarifies the subject.