唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构较为混乱，建议简化句子并注意时态和词汇的正确使用，同时避免重复表达。

範例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions. For instance, when I feel angry, I listen to rap songs to relieve my stress. Singing is closely connected to how I feel.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句型，明确表达学习内容和效果。

範例: Yes, I took a music class in high school where I learned how to use my vocal cords properly. This training helped me improve my singing and made my voice stronger.

建議: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化表达并注意主谓一致和时态。

範例: I want to sing for the public because a few years ago I joined a music competition. When I stand on stage, I enjoy having people focus on my voice and what I am singing.

建議: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，建议使用更简洁明了的句子，明确表达观点并提供具体理由。

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it expresses emotions. When people listen to a song, it can make them feel joyful and relaxed.

× I love singing so much because I think that is kind of way to express my emotion.

✓ I love singing so much because I think that is a kind of way to express my emotion.

这里缺少冠词“a”，在表示“一种”的时候，应该用“a kind of”。

× I just think some rap song to help me relax my stress.

✓ I just think of some rap songs to help me relax my stress.

动词“think”后面需要加介词“of”表示“想起”，并且“song”应为复数形式“songs”，因为这里指的是一些歌曲。

× So it's kind of singing is connected to my emotion.

✓ So singing is kind of connected to my emotion.

句子中“it's kind of singing is”结构重复且不通顺，应简化为“singing is kind of connected”。

× I joined a music class is teaching how to singing using your vocal cords rather than your thoughts.

✓ I joined a music class that teaches how to sing using your vocal cords rather than your thoughts.

原句结构混乱，缺少关系代词“that”，动词“teaching”应改为“teaches”，动词“singing”应为动词不定式“to sing”。

× So these cards will help me a lot because I think that my singing is become more powerful and more.

✓ So these classes will help me a lot because I think that my singing has become more powerful and more expressive.

“cards”应为“classes”，且“is become”错误，应为“has become”，句尾“and more”不完整，需补充内容。

× When I standing in the stage I will enjoy people focus on me and my voice, my what I'm saying.

✓ When I am standing on the stage, I enjoy people focusing on me, my voice, and what I'm saying.

“standing”前缺少助动词“am”，介词应为“on the stage”，动词“focus”应改为动名词“focusing”，句子时态应统一。

× I want to sing for public because few years ago I joined a music competition.

✓ I want to sing for the public because a few years ago I joined a music competition.

“public”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特定群体；“few years ago”前应加不定冠词“a”，表示“一些年”。

× If you wish everyone listen to your song can bring happiness.

✓ If you wish everyone to listen to your song, it can bring happiness.

“wish”后面应加不定式“to listen”，且句子缺少主语和谓语之间的连接词，需加逗号和“it”。

× I think they must get this.

✓ I think they must get it.

“get this”用法不当，应该用代词“it”指代前文内容。

× So thinking definitely can bring happiness.

✓ So I think singing definitely can bring happiness.

“thinking”用法不当，应为“I think singing”，使句子完整且符合语境。