唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「Carolyn places」の意味が不明瞭で、明確に説明する必要があります。また、"and moreover it's it is"の部分は冗長なので簡潔にしましょう。より具体的な詳細を加え、文を5文以内にまとめることを意識してください。

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. I often go to a karaoke bar with my friends on weekends. Singing reduces my stress and refreshes my mind after a long day. It's a fun way to spend time together and improve my mood.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「learned about her singing」は不自然で、「learned how to sing」が適切です。また、繰り返しがあり冗長なので、簡潔に表現しましょう。将来の希望を述べる際は、明確な理由や期待を加えると良いです。

範例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. I usually sing for fun by myself. However, I would like to learn from professional teachers in the future to improve my skills.

建議: 回答は直接的ですが、文法の誤りと不自然な表現があります。例えば、「singing with by myself」は誤りで、「singing by myself」が正しいです。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使い、文をつなげると自然になります。

範例: Actually, I don't want to sing for others because I'm not confident singing in public. I prefer to enjoy singing by myself where I feel comfortable.

建議: 文が長く、文法的な誤りや冗長な表現が多いです。例えば、「bring people happiness」は「brings happiness」に修正し、接続詞を使って文を整理しましょう。具体的な理由や効果を明確に述べると良いです。

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it creates special moments when people sing with friends or family. It helps them enjoy time together and reduces stress.

× I usually go to Carolyn places to sing with my friend, especially on weekends.

✓ I usually go to Carolyn's place to sing with my friend, especially on weekends.

The phrase 'Carolyn places' is incorrect because 'places' is plural and does not show possession. The correct form is 'Carolyn's place' to indicate the place belonging to Carolyn.

× I usually go to Carolyn places to sing with my friend, especially on weekends.

✓ I usually go to Carolyn's place to sing with my friends, especially on weekends.

If the student sings with more than one friend, 'friends' should be plural. However, if only one friend is meant, 'friend' is correct. The original sentence is ambiguous, but 'friend' is acceptable if singular.

× I just enjoy by myself.

✓ I just enjoy it by myself.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object. The sentence lacks an object, so 'it' is added to clarify what is enjoyed.

× I just enjoy singing with by myself.

✓ I just enjoy singing by myself.

The phrase 'with by myself' is incorrect. 'By myself' alone correctly expresses doing something alone. The word 'with' should be removed.

× Yes I think singing bring people happiness because it has special power for if people sing with their friend or family it is a very special times for them because they can enjoy a thing together and makes it makes reduce stress.

✓ Yes, I think singing brings people happiness because it has special power. If people sing with their friends or family, it is a very special time for them because they can enjoy something together and it helps reduce stress.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'singing' (third person singular). 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'people'. 'Times' should be singular 'time' because 'a very special time' is correct. 'A thing' is vague; 'something' is better. The phrase 'makes it makes reduce stress' is incorrect; 'it helps reduce stress' is clearer and grammatically correct.