唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use simple and correct sentences to express your interest in singing. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then give a reason or example.

範例: Yes, I like singing very much because it is my passion. I want to be a singer in the future since I have a good voice and enjoy composing songs.

建議: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer structure. Avoid awkward phrases and explain your experience with specific details.

範例: Yes, I took a singing class at school that lasted about two hours. In this class, I learned how to compose songs and connect the lyrics properly.

建議: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

範例: I don't have a specific person to sing for. It depends on the occasion, but sometimes I like to sing for my friends, relatives, and family members.

建議: Make your answer more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. For me, singing and listening to songs with meaningful lyrics, especially pop music, helps me relax and feel comfortable.

× Yes, I do like singing and my personal interest in in singing is a very high demanding.

✓ Yes, I do like singing and my personal interest in singing is very high.

The phrase 'in in singing' contains a repeated preposition 'in'. Also, 'a very high demanding' is incorrect; 'demanding' is an adjective and does not fit here. The correct phrase is 'my personal interest in singing is very high.' This corrects the preposition usage and removes the incorrect adjective usage.

× This is my aims of my life to get involved in the singing field and I I like it because of my voice is very good my compose.

✓ My aim in life is to get involved in the singing field, and I like it because my voice is very good and I can compose.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'This is my aims of my life' is incorrect; 'aims' should be singular 'aim' and the sentence structure is awkward. Also, 'I I like it because of my voice is very good my compose' is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence clarifies the subject and verb agreement and improves sentence flow.

× Yes, in my school time I had one class for singing to attend and I used to take this class for two hours almost and learn to have to compose of this singing and also how to make the lyrics connected to.

✓ Yes, during my school time I attended one singing class, which I used to take for almost two hours, and I learned how to compose songs and how to connect the lyrics.

The original sentence misuses past tense and verb forms: 'had one class for singing to attend' is awkward; 'learn to have to compose of this singing' is incorrect. The correction uses proper past tense verbs 'attended' and 'learned' and corrects verb phrases for clarity.

× The There is no specific person that I want to sing for.

✓ There is no specific person that I want to sing for.

The original sentence redundantly uses 'The There'. Removing 'The' corrects the sentence to proper 'There is' construction.

× It's depend on the, it's depend on the parties and occasionally I would like to sing for my friends and for relative as well for the family member.

✓ It depends on the parties, and occasionally I would like to sing for my friends, relatives, and family members as well.

'It's depend' is incorrect; the correct form is 'It depends' (third person singular). Also, 'for relative' and 'for the family member' should be pluralized to 'relatives' and 'family members' to match the context. The sentence is also restructured for clarity.

× Well, for sure this can be very true that singing can bring happiness to people, especially to me.

✓ Well, for sure, it is very true that singing can bring happiness to people, especially to me.

The phrase 'this can be very true' is awkward; 'it is very true' is more natural. Adding commas improves readability.

× It really makes me relax and comfortable to listen to the musics with the proper lyrics and the meaning and the compose, especially the pop songs.

✓ It really makes me feel relaxed and comfortable listening to music with proper lyrics, meaning, and composition, especially pop songs.

'Makes me relax and comfortable' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.' 'Musics' is uncountable and should be 'music.' 'The compose' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'composition.' The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.