唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrar ve belirsiz ifadelerden kaçının. Cümlenizi doğrudan soruya yanıt verecek şekilde yapılandırın ve destekleyici detaylar ekleyin. Örneğin, neden şarkı söylemeyi sevdiğinizi veya sevmediğinizi açıkça belirtin.

範例: I used to enjoy singing when I was younger because I admired famous singers like Justin Bieber. However, as I grew older, I realized my voice wasn't strong enough, so I don't sing much anymore.

建議: Cevabınızı daha net ve düzenli hale getirin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve belirsiz ifadeleri azaltın. Cümlenizi doğrudan soruya yanıt verecek şekilde kurun ve deneyiminiz hakkında spesifik detaylar verin.

範例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was a child by joining the school choir. I enjoyed participating in many performances, but eventually I realized singing wasn't my passion.

建議: Cevabınızda daha açık ve tutarlı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Konuşmanızda gereksiz tekrarları ve belirsizlikleri azaltarak, doğrudan soruya yanıt verin. Düşüncelerinizi mantıklı bir şekilde bağlayacak geçiş ifadeleri kullanın.

範例: I believe singing is something personal, so I would sing for myself. Of course, professional singers perform for their audiences, but for me, singing is a way to express my feelings.

建議: Cevabınızda daha anlamlı ve ilgili detaylar kullanmalısınız. Para ve mutluluk arasındaki bağlantıyı açıklamak yerine, şarkı söylemenin insanlara nasıl mutluluk verdiğini daha doğal ve mantıklı şekilde ifade edin.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others. Many people feel joyful when they sing their favorite songs.

× I used to like singing, but when I grow up I noticed that my sound is not really good.

✓ I used to like singing, but when I grew up I noticed that my voice was not really good.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Grow' should be in the past tense 'grew' to match 'used to' and 'noticed'. Also, 'sound' is better replaced with 'voice' in this context.

× When I was a child I was looking at the singers and wishing I could be one of them, like Justin Bieber or more.

✓ When I was a child, I looked at singers and wished I could be one of them, like Justin Bieber or others.

The past continuous 'was looking' and 'wishing' are better replaced with simple past 'looked' and 'wished' to describe habitual past actions. 'Or more' is incorrect; 'or others' is appropriate.

× When I was a child, I was in the school choir.

✓ When I was a child, I was in the school choir.

This sentence is correct; no preposition error found.

× It was a club like When you think, I think you know that I enjoyed it, It was good.

✓ It was a club, and I think you know that I enjoyed it. It was good.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be split into clearer sentences for better understanding.

× I participated in lots of shows, but it wasn't really for me.

✓ I participated in lots of shows, but it wasn't really for me.

This sentence is correct in past tense usage.

× I guess, 'cause I'm not singing right now.

✓ I guess, because I'm not singing right now.

The contraction ''cause' is informal and should be replaced with 'because' in formal speech. The tense is correct.

× I really don't enjoy singing right now.

✓ I really don't enjoy singing right now.

This sentence is correct in present tense usage.

× Myself, I guess I don't think there's someone I should be singing for.

✓ Myself, I guess I don't think there is someone I should be singing for.

The phrase 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is' and should be expanded for clarity. The pronoun usage is acceptable here.

× I think you should sing for yourself and everyone should sing for themselves.

✓ I think you should sing for yourself, and everyone should sing for themselves.

The sentence is correct; a comma is added for clarity.

× Or maybe famous singers can sing for the audience.

✓ Or maybe famous singers can sing for the audience.

This sentence is correct.

× And I don't know people, but I don't know you can sing for yourself.

✓ And I don't know, people, but I think you can sing for yourself.

The sentence is unclear and fragmented. Adding commas and rephrasing improves clarity.

× You should. That's a.

✓ You should. That's all.

The sentence is incomplete; 'That's a.' should be completed to 'That's all.' or similar.

× I think yeah, singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ I think, yeah, singing can bring happiness to people.

Adding commas improves the flow; pronoun usage is correct.

× Like famous singers get money from singing and money is happiness.

✓ For example, famous singers get money from singing, and money brings happiness.

'Like' is informal here; 'for example' is better. Also, 'money is happiness' is better expressed as 'money brings happiness'.

× I think everyone is happy when money comes to them and singing is easy.

✓ I think everyone is happy when money comes to them, and singing is easy.

Adding a comma improves sentence clarity.

× So yeah, I think thinking can bring happiness to people, yeah.

✓ So yeah, I think singing can bring happiness to people, yeah.

'Thinking' is a mistake; it should be 'singing' to match the context.