唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan tata bahasa agar lebih alami dan efektif. Misalnya, gunakan 'relieve my stress' bukan 'realize my stress', dan hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'and' yang tidak perlu. Juga, buat kalimat lebih singkat dan jelas.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel relaxed. In my free time, especially when I don't know what to do, I prefer to sing. I often sing in the bathroom while taking a bath.

建議: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan penggunaan kosakata agar lebih jelas dan alami. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide. Misalnya, gunakan 'I sing naturally' dan jelaskan maksud 'sing in the chart' dengan kata yang tepat.

範例: No, I have never learned how to sing formally because it comes naturally to me. I enjoy singing popular songs, and my sister is especially good at singing. We often sing together every day.

建議: Lengkapi kalimat yang tidak selesai dan perbaiki tata bahasa agar lebih jelas. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan hindari pengulangan. Jelaskan alasan dengan lebih spesifik dan gunakan linking words untuk kelancaran.

範例: I want to sing for my pets, my cats and dogs, because they are like my children. I often sing and dance with them during my free time since it helps me relax and feel happy.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kosakata, serta lengkapi kalimat yang tidak selesai. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata. Jelaskan alasan dengan contoh yang spesifik.

範例: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people. It is very effective in relieving stress. When you feel burnt out, singing your favorite song can help release anxiety and improve your mood.

× Singing can realize my stress and it can make me more relaxed.

✓ Singing can relieve my stress and it can make me more relaxed.

The verb 'realize' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb to express reducing stress is 'relieve'. 'Relieve' is a verb that means to reduce or remove something unpleasant, such as stress. The original sentence misuses 'realize' which means to become aware of something, not to reduce stress.

× So in my leisure time when I have no idea how to do, I prefer to sing.

✓ So in my leisure time when I have no idea what to do, I prefer to sing.

The phrase 'have no idea how to do' is incorrect because 'how to do' requires an object or context. The correct phrase is 'have no idea what to do', which means not knowing what action to take. This is a common prepositional and phrase usage error.

× And I always sing in the chart.

✓ And I always sing in the shower.

The phrase 'sing in the chart' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misuse. The correct phrase is 'sing in the shower', which is a common expression meaning singing while bathing. 'Chart' does not fit contextually or grammatically here.

× And my family, my sister especially, uh, really good in singing.

✓ And my family, especially my sister, is really good at singing.

The original sentence lacks a verb and misuses the preposition 'in'. The corrected sentence adds the verb 'is' for proper sentence structure and uses the correct preposition 'at' with 'good' to indicate skill. Also, the phrase order is improved for clarity.

× So we are always singing every day.

✓ So we always sing every day.

The present continuous 'are singing' is less appropriate here because the sentence refers to a habitual action. The simple present 'sing' is better to express regular activities. This is a tense usage correction.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× I do want to sing for my pets, my cats and dogs, because they're like my child, so I often sing and dance with them, especially in my leisure time.

✓ I do want to sing for my pets, my cats and dogs, because they're like my children, so I often sing and dance with them, especially in my leisure time.

The word 'child' is singular, but the speaker refers to multiple pets, so the plural 'children' is correct. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Like I said before, singing and dance can relieve my.

✓ Like I said before, singing and dancing can relieve me.

The phrase 'singing and dance' mixes a gerund and a noun; it should be parallel as 'singing and dancing'. Also, 'relieve my' is incomplete; the object is missing. The correct phrase is 'relieve me' meaning to reduce stress or discomfort. This is a sentence structure and verb usage error.

× Singing is very very good to relieve stress.

✓ Singing is very, very good at relieving stress.

The phrase 'good to relieve' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'good at' followed by a gerund ('relieving'). This is a preposition and verb form error.

× So when you are burnt on you just need to singing your favorite song to release your anxiety and you.

✓ So when you are burnt out, you just need to sing your favorite song to release your anxiety.

The phrase 'burnt on' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'burnt out' meaning exhausted. Also, 'need to singing' is incorrect; it should be 'need to sing' (base verb after 'to'). The sentence ends abruptly with 'and you' which is incomplete and removed for clarity. This is a preposition and verb form error, and sentence structure error.