唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is good but try to make it more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, instead of repeating 'friends' and 'calm', you can say: "I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. I often sing along with my friends, which strengthens our friendship and makes the experience more enjoyable."

範例: I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. I often sing along with my friends, which strengthens our friendship and makes the experience more enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by organizing ideas clearly and using linking words. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'some basics about the vocal cord'. Instead, say 'basic singing techniques'.

範例: I haven't learned singing professionally, but a friend who has experience in the music industry taught me some basic singing techniques. Although I haven't taken formal classes, I enjoy listening to his songs and hope to learn singing professionally someday.

建議: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid unclear words like 'singulation'. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the songs you want to sing.

範例: I would love to sing for my parents because they enjoy my singing and have always dreamed that I become a singer. Although I am not a professional yet, if I get the chance, I would like to sing traditional folk songs for them.

建議: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and use clear expressions. For example, explain how singing expresses emotions and connects people.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. It is a form of art that helps people enjoy themselves and feel connected to others.

× Whenever I try to sing some song and listen also to that song, I usually sing along with my friends who is build the camaraderie with my friends.

✓ Whenever I try to sing some song and also listen to that song, I usually sing along with my friends who build camaraderie with me.

The verb 'is' does not agree with the plural subject 'friends'. It should be 'who build' instead of 'who is build'. Also, 'build the camaraderie with my friends' is awkward; 'build camaraderie with me' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I love singing not alone but mostly with my friends.

✓ So I love singing not alone, but mostly with my friends.

A comma is needed before 'but' when it connects two independent clauses to improve sentence clarity.

× It makes me calm as well as eating.

✓ It makes me calm as well as when I am eating.

The phrase 'as well as eating' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Adding 'when I am' clarifies the comparison and corrects the prepositional usage.

× I must say I haven't learned it professionally, but one friend of mine who has been in this industry for quite a long has taught me some basics about the vocal cord.

✓ I must say I haven't learned it professionally, but one friend of mine who has been in this industry for quite a long time has taught me some basics about the vocal cords.

The phrase 'for quite a long' is incomplete; it should be 'for quite a long time'. Also, 'vocal cord' should be plural 'vocal cords' as it refers to both cords.

× So not really. I haven't taken classes but I enjoy listening to his song as well as I also have interest.

✓ So not really. I haven't taken classes but I enjoy listening to his songs and I also have an interest.

'His song' should be plural 'his songs' if referring generally. Also, 'have interest' needs an article 'an' to be grammatically correct.

× Someday if I might get a chance then I would obviously try to sing and try to learn it professionally.

✓ Someday if I get a chance, then I would obviously try to sing and learn it professionally.

Using 'might' with 'if' is redundant. 'If I get a chance' is correct. Also, 'try to learn it' is better than 'try to learn it professionally' for clarity and conciseness.

× I would love to sing for my parents because they love my singing and they also had this dream one day that I could turn out to be the singer, but not really.

✓ I would love to sing for my parents because they love my singing and they also had this dream that one day I could turn out to be a singer, but not really.

The phrase 'had this dream one day' is awkward; 'had this dream that one day' is correct. Also, 'the singer' should be 'a singer' as it is a general reference.

× But obviously if I have some professional singulation or if I get a chance to sing, then I would probably like sing a song.

✓ But obviously if I have some professional training or if I get a chance to sing, then I would probably like to sing a song.

'Singulation' is incorrect; the correct word is 'training'. Also, 'like sing a song' should be 'like to sing a song' to be grammatically correct.

× For example, they love the song traditional folk song, so I would love to.

✓ For example, they love traditional folk songs, so I would love to sing them.

The phrase 'the song traditional folk song' is incorrect. It should be 'traditional folk songs'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'sing them' completes the thought.

× Yes, obviously singing is a kind of art to use this, uh, not much common to the people.

✓ Yes, obviously singing is a kind of art that is not very common to people.

The phrase 'to use this' is unclear and incorrect. 'That is not very common to people' correctly modifies 'art'. Also, 'not much common' should be 'not very common'.

× So singing, uh, makes feel like, uh, they are happy.

✓ So singing makes people feel like they are happy.

The verb 'makes' needs a direct object; 'feel' should be preceded by 'people' to clarify who is feeling happy.

× It is kind of expressing some kind of emotions.

✓ It is a kind of expression of some emotions.

'Expressing' is a verb form; here a noun 'expression' is needed. Also, 'some kind of emotions' is better as 'some emotions' or 'a kind of emotion'.

× So, uh, singing usually make people happier because, uh, they tend to enjoy it and they tend to communicate as well as connected to the singing more relatively.

✓ So, singing usually makes people happier because they tend to enjoy it and tend to communicate as well as feel more connected to the singing.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'connected to the singing more relatively' is awkward; 'feel more connected to the singing' is clearer and grammatically correct.