唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is quite detailed but a bit redundant and slightly unnatural in phrasing. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'You do love singing' and 'When once you start singing'.

範例: Yes, I love singing because it allows me to express my emotions freely. Since I started training as a classical singer at the age of three, singing has become a part of my life. Moreover, it makes me feel relaxed and secure, as if I am in a different world.

建議: Your answer is informative but could be more concise and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid informal phrases like 'So yeah, that's it.' Also, clarify the timeline more naturally.

範例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. My parents noticed my interest in singing when I was two years old, so they enrolled me in a singing school. I continued my training until I was fifteen, which helped me improve my skills significantly.

建議: Your answer is clear but informal and slightly repetitive. Try to use more formal language and avoid filler words like 'yeah'. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: I usually sing for myself and my family. However, in the future, I hope to gain more recognition and explore new opportunities through singing.

建議: Your answer conveys your opinion well but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express a wide range of emotions. For example, singing helps me release my emotions and relieve stress, which makes me feel happier.

× I've been trained as a classical singer when I was 3 and it has stuck with me ever since.

✓ I was trained as a classical singer when I was 3 and it has stuck with me ever since.

The phrase 'I've been trained' (present perfect passive) is incorrect with the specific past time 'when I was 3'. The past simple 'I was trained' should be used to indicate a completed action at a specific time in the past.

× When once you start singing, it just makes you feel like you're in a whole new different world and it provides you a sense of security within yourself.

✓ Once you start singing, it just makes you feel like you're in a whole new different world and it provides you a sense of security within yourself.

The phrase 'When once' is redundant and incorrect. Use either 'When' or 'Once' to introduce the clause, not both together.

× And the last time I trained I was 15.

✓ And the last time I trained was when I was 15.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject for the second clause. Adding 'was when' clarifies the time reference and maintains correct past tense structure.

× I do think so they can bring people happiness.

✓ I do think they can bring people happiness.

The phrase 'I do think so they can' is ungrammatical. The word 'so' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence structure. Removing 'so' corrects the sentence.