唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but to improve, try to use more natural phrasing and correct grammar, such as 'whenever I have time' instead of 'whenever I have get time'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

範例: Yes, I definitely love singing because it helps me relax and refresh my mind. For instance, after a long day, singing my favorite songs makes me feel happier and less stressed.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. To improve, respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition.

範例: I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but as a Bengali who loves Hindi songs, I listen to music almost every day and try to learn by practicing along with the songs.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar, and provide specific reasons with linking words. Avoid confusing phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

範例: I usually sing for myself because it helps me relax and feel comfortable. I enjoy singing songs in Hindi, English, and Bengali whenever I have free time.

建議: Your answer shows your opinion but is affected by grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. To improve, express your ideas clearly with correct grammar, use linking words to connect your points, and provide specific reasons or examples.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When people feel bored, listening to music can help them relax and refresh their minds.

× Like singing? Yes definitely I love singing.

✓ Do you like singing? Yes, definitely I love singing.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'Do' to form a proper question. Adding 'Do' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Whenever I have get time I like to sing because it helps me to relax and refresh my mind.

✓ Whenever I get time, I like to sing because it helps me to relax and refresh my mind.

The phrase 'have get time' is incorrect. The correct form is 'get time' or 'have time'. Here, 'Whenever I get time' is appropriate. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity.

× For example, after a long day, singing my favorite songs makes me feel happiness and less stress, that's why I love it.

✓ For example, after a long day, singing my favorite songs makes me feel happy and less stressed; that's why I love it.

The word 'happiness' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective 'happy' to describe the feeling. Similarly, 'less stress' should be 'less stressed' to describe the state. Also, replacing the comma with a semicolon improves sentence structure.

× Actually I am a Bengali I love Hindi song and almost every day I listen music and and after that I learned it.

✓ Actually, I am Bengali. I love Hindi songs and almost every day I listen to music, and after that, I learned it.

The sentence needs commas for clarity. 'Hindi song' should be plural 'Hindi songs' to match the context. 'Listen music' requires the preposition 'to' as 'listen to music'. Also, 'and and' is a repetition error. 'Learned it' is acceptable if referring to learning to sing.

× I did not any quotes and I listen every day and.

✓ I did not have any quotes, but I listen every day.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Did not any quotes' is incorrect; it should be 'did not have any quotes'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' Adding 'but' connects the ideas properly.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ For whom do you want to sing?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun after a preposition. Also, the preposition 'for' should precede the pronoun for correct sentence structure.

× In my perspective, I sing for me because when I'm building a field I sing a Hindi, English and Bengali because it helps me to relax and comfortable my mind and whenever I am a long time I nip it.

✓ From my perspective, I sing for myself because when I'm in the field, I sing Hindi, English, and Bengali songs as it helps me relax and feel comfortable. Whenever I spend a long time there, I enjoy it.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'In my perspective' should be 'From my perspective'; 'I sing for me' should be 'I sing for myself'; 'building a field' is unclear, likely 'in the field'; 'sing a Hindi, English and Bengali' should be 'sing Hindi, English, and Bengali songs'; 'comfortable my mind' should be 'feel comfortable'; 'whenever I am a long time I nip it' is unclear and corrected to 'whenever I spend a long time there, I enjoy it.' These corrections improve clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I personally believe singing can a bringing happiness for people.

✓ Yes, I personally believe singing can bring happiness to people.

The phrase 'can a bringing' is incorrect. The modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'bring'. Also, 'happiness for people' is better expressed as 'happiness to people.'

× When there are people can feel boring they are should be listen music because it helps me to relax and refresh their mind that's why I personally believe.

✓ When people feel bored, they should listen to music because it helps them relax and refresh their minds; that's why I personally believe so.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'there are people can feel boring' should be 'people feel bored'; 'they are should be listen music' should be 'they should listen to music'; 'helps me to relax' should be 'helps them relax'; 'refresh their mind' should be 'refresh their minds'; adding a semicolon improves sentence flow. These corrections make the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.