唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'singing' and 'can't sing well', you could say: 'I don't enjoy singing because I lack confidence and haven't had formal training.' Also, ensure correct grammar and capitalization.

範例: I don't enjoy singing because I lack confidence and haven't had formal training.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating 'how to sing' twice. You could say: 'I haven't learned to sing yet, but I hope to have the opportunity to learn in the future.'

範例: I haven't learned to sing yet, but I hope to have the opportunity to learn in the future.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow. Instead of repeating 'friend' and 'closest friend of mine', you could say: 'I want to sing for my best friend because she means a lot to me and I want to show my appreciation.'

範例: I want to sing for my best friend because she means a lot to me and I want to show my appreciation.

建議: There are some grammar and word choice errors. 'Seeing' should be 'singing', and the sentence is a bit unclear. A better answer would be: 'Definitely, singing allows people to express their emotions, and studies have shown that expressing emotions contributes positively to mental health.'

範例: Definitely, singing allows people to express their emotions, and studies have shown that expressing emotions contributes positively to mental health.

× I don't like singing because I Can't Sing well and I haven't received any formal training.

✓ I don't like singing because I can't sing well and I haven't received any formal training.

The modal verb 'can't' should be in lowercase as it is not at the beginning of the sentence. Capitalising 'Can't' is incorrect in the middle of a sentence.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

The verb 'learn' in the present perfect tense should use the past participle form. 'Learned' is the preferred past participle in American English, while 'learnt' is acceptable in British English. Since the rest of the text uses American English spelling (e.g., 'learned'), consistency suggests using 'learned'.

× I haven't learned how to sing, but I wish I could have the chance to learn how to sing in the future.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing, but I wish I could have the chance to learn how to sing in the future.

No correction needed here as the modal verb usage is correct.

× I want to sing for my best friend and she is the closest friend of mine and I really want to show appreciation.

✓ I want to sing for my best friend, who is the closest friend of mine, and I really want to show appreciation.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence. Adding commas and a relative pronoun 'who' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× Definitely, seeing allows people to show to express their emotions and studies have shown that expressing emotions can is contributed to people's mental health.

✓ Definitely, singing allows people to express their emotions, and studies have shown that expressing emotions contributes to people's mental health.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect and should be 'singing'. The phrase 'show to express' is redundant; 'express' alone suffices. The phrase 'can is contributed' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'contributes'. Also, adding a comma before 'and' separates the two independent clauses properly.