唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons. For example, say 'Yes, I like singing because it is enjoyable and beneficial for mental health.'

範例: Yes, I like singing because it is enjoyable and helps improve my mental health by reducing stress.

建議: Use past tense consistently and provide more specific details. For example, say 'Yes, I learned to sing when I was in grade one or two during a music class.'

範例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in grade one during a music class at school, where I practiced different songs.

建議: Avoid filler words and be more precise. Start with a clear topic sentence and explain your preference. For example, 'I prefer to sing for myself during my free time because it relaxes me.'

範例: I prefer to sing for myself during my free time because it helps me relax and enjoy music, especially English songs by famous singers.

建議: Speak clearly and avoid unnecessary fillers. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it improves mental health and can be combined with dancing.'

範例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it improves our mental health, and often people enjoy dancing along with the music.

× Yeah, I like to singing and singing I like to sing because it is a funny thing and also it is very good for mental mental health also so.

✓ Yeah, I like singing and I like to sing because it is a fun thing and also it is very good for mental health.

The phrase 'like to singing' is incorrect because after 'like to' we use the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'funny' is incorrect here; 'fun' is the correct adjective to describe something enjoyable. Repeating 'mental' is redundant. So, the sentence should be corrected to 'I like singing and I like to sing because it is a fun thing and also it is very good for mental health.'

× Yeah, I have learned about singing. When I was grade one or two, I have participated a music class, so at that time I learned to sing.

✓ Yeah, I have learned about singing. When I was in grade one or two, I participated in a music class, so at that time I learned to sing.

The phrase 'I have participated a music class' is incorrect because 'participate' requires the preposition 'in' before the object. Also, the present perfect 'have participated' is not appropriate with a specific past time 'when I was grade one or two'; simple past 'participated' is correct. Additionally, 'was grade one or two' should be 'was in grade one or two' to be grammatically correct.

× Uh, not too special person. Uh, I prefer to sing for me because when I'm in free time, uh, I uh, sing some songs, especially English songs, uh, from uh, famous, uh, singers.

✓ Uh, not a very special person. Uh, I prefer to sing for myself because when I have free time, I sing some songs, especially English songs, from famous singers.

The phrase 'prefer to sing for me' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used when the subject and object are the same. Also, 'when I'm in free time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'when I have free time'. The article 'a' is missing before 'very special person'.

× Yeah, exactly. Uh, uh, you know, if we sing, it is a very good for our mental head because when we sing every uh, here to music and also we sometime like to dance with the song. So I think.

✓ Yeah, exactly. You know, if we sing, it is very good for our mental health because when we sing, we listen to music and sometimes like to dance to the song. So I think so.

The phrase 'it is a very good for our mental head' is incorrect; 'a' is unnecessary and 'mental head' should be 'mental health'. 'Here to music' is a mistake; the correct phrase is 'listen to music'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Also, 'dance with the song' is better expressed as 'dance to the song'. The sentence is corrected accordingly.