唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子结构较为混乱，表达不够自然，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

範例: Yes, I like singing, especially when I sing karaoke with my friends. It is a fun way to relax and relieve stress from my busy life.

建議: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在较多错误，句子冗长且不连贯。建议直接回答问题，并用简洁的句子说明情况。

範例: No, I have never learned professional singing skills. However, in primary school, our music teacher used to sing songs with us during lessons.

建議: 回答中表达不清楚，语法错误较多，且信息混乱。建议理清思路，使用简单句子表达感谢朋友的原因和想为她唱歌的愿望。

範例: I want to sing for my friend who helped me relax during a stressful exam period. Singing a song for her is my way to say thank you for her support.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，句子结构简单且有重复。建议使用更准确的表达和连接词，使回答更流畅。

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, attending concerts is entertaining, and listening to singers makes people feel joyful. Also, when I sing, I feel happy and relaxed.

× Yes, I like singing, but it's not the type that particularly like I was singing with my friends in karaoke because I think it is a type of entertainment for me.

✓ Yes, I like singing, but it's not the type that I particularly like. I was singing with my friends in karaoke because I think it is a type of entertainment for me.

原句中“that particularly like I was singing”结构混乱，缺少主语，导致语法错误。应将其拆分为两个句子，明确主语和谓语，使句子通顺。

× I was singing with my friends in karaoke because I think it is a type of entertainment for me.

✓ I was singing with my friends at karaoke because I think it is a type of entertainment for me.

英语中表示在卡拉OK场所时，通常用介词“at”而非“in”。

× It can help me to release the pressure in the high pressure life.

✓ It can help me to release the pressure in high-pressure life.

“pressure”是不可数名词，前面不需要加冠词“the”；“high pressure life”应改为复合形容词“high-pressure life”。

× Umm, I think no, I don't learn some professional skills on singing, but if it is accountable that in our primary school they have some music lesson, uh, the teacher will sing with us with different songs, but not particularly teachers.

✓ Umm, I think no, I haven't learned any professional skills in singing, but in our primary school we had some music lessons. The teacher would sing different songs with us, but not professional teachers.

原句时态混乱，表达不清。应使用现在完成时“haven't learned”表示至今未学过；“have some music lesson”应改为过去时“had some music lessons”；“will sing”改为过去习惯用法“would sing”。

× I don't learn some professional skills on singing

✓ I don't learn some professional skills in singing

动词“learn”后接技能时，介词应为“in”而非“on”。

× they have some music lesson

✓ they have some music lessons

“lesson”应使用复数形式“lessons”，因为表示多节课。

× I want to sing for my friends commissioner because I was high pressure in those with IO exam and he called me to the karaoke to relax so I want to sing a song to her to thanks for his accompany.

✓ I want to sing for my friend, the commissioner, because I was under high pressure during the IO exam and he called me to karaoke to relax, so I want to sing a song to him to thank him for his company.

原句中“friends commissioner”应为“friend, the commissioner”；“was high pressure”应为“was under high pressure”；“to the karaoke”应为“to karaoke”；“to her to thanks for his accompany”中人称代词混乱，应统一为“to him to thank him for his company”。

× I was high pressure in those with IO exam

✓ I was under high pressure during the IO exam

表达“处于高压状态”应使用“be under pressure”；“in those with IO exam”表达不清，应改为“during the IO exam”。

× I want to sing a song to her to thanks for his accompany.

✓ I want to sing a song to him to thank him for his company.

代词“her”和“his”指代不一致，应统一为“him”；“thanks”应为动词原形“thank”；“accompany”应为名词“company”。

× Yes, I think of course I've been singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I think of course singing can bring happiness to people.

“I've been singing”是现在完成进行时，表示动作持续发生，不符合句意。此处应使用动名词“singing”作为主语。

× For example, people go to concert, it is entertainment.

✓ For example, people go to concerts; it is entertainment.

“concert”应使用复数形式“concerts”，表示泛指多场音乐会。

× People listen to singer on the concert and they will feel very happiness.

✓ People listen to singers at the concert and they will feel very happy.

“listen to singer”应为复数“singers”；“on the concert”应为“at the concert”；“feel very happiness”应为“feel very happy”，形容词用来修饰感受。

× they will feel very happiness.

✓ they will feel very happy.

“happiness”是名词，感受应用形容词“happy”修饰。

× Also when I singing I feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Also when I am singing, I feel happy and relaxed.

“when I singing”缺少助动词，应为“when I am singing”。