唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 감정을 표현하는 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여야 합니다. 예를 들어, 노래를 부를 때 느끼는 감정과 그 이유를 명확히 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel relaxed and happy. When I sing, I can express my emotions, which makes me feel satisfied. Although I don't think I sing very well, I enjoy the experience.

建議: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적으로도 부정확합니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 배운 경험과 그 경험이 어떻게 도움이 되었는지 구체적으로 설명해야 합니다.

範例: Yes, I have taken singing lessons a couple of times at university. Some teachers visited us and taught us techniques to improve our singing, which was very helpful. However, I haven't had any lessons since then.

建議: 답변에 오타와 문법 오류가 있으며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 노래를 부른 대상과 그 경험에 대해 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 필요합니다.

範例: I usually sing for myself, but I have also sung for my sisters. For example, I sang a song called "Chica" to celebrate their marriage, which was a very good experience.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 모호합니다. 노래가 사람들에게 행복을 주는 이유를 명확히 설명하고, 자신의 경험을 구체적으로 연결하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because I feel happy when I listen to singers. That's why I tried to sing for my sister to celebrate her marriage, hoping to make the moment memorable.

× When I sing a second I'm not going to just listen.

✓ When I sing for a second, I'm not just going to listen.

The original sentence lacks the preposition 'for' to indicate duration and has an awkward phrase 'going to just listen'. The correction adds 'for' and reorders 'just' to correctly modify 'listen'.

× I think I Can't Sing well.

✓ I think I can't sing well.

Capitalization error in 'Can't' and 'Sing' should be lowercase unless at the beginning of a sentence. Pronouns are correct but capitalization affects readability.

× That's why the university actually I was in a couple of and some teachers can visit us and they touch the how to solve it.

✓ That's why, at the university where I was, a couple of teachers visited us and showed us how to solve it.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'I was in a couple of' is incomplete. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But after that I have never got a lesson for.

✓ But after that, I have never had a lesson.

The phrase 'got a lesson for' is incorrect. 'Have never had a lesson' is the correct present perfect form to express the experience up to now.

× I usually swim for myself, but for my sisters actually, I used Song of Chica celebrating their marriage.

✓ I usually sing for myself, but for my sisters actually, I used the song 'Chica' to celebrate their marriage.

'Swim' is incorrect in context; it should be 'sing'. Also, 'used Song of Chica celebrating their marriage' is awkward; corrected to 'used the song 'Chica' to celebrate their marriage' for proper preposition and article usage.

× So that's quite a good experience experience.

✓ So that's quite a good experience.

The word 'experience' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the duplicate improves clarity.

× Yes, I can be sure because I get happy from the singers, sing a song.

✓ Yes, I am sure because I feel happy when singers sing a song.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'I get happy from the singers, sing a song' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning with proper sentence structure.

× So that's why I try to sing for my sister to celebrate the marriage you can remember.

✓ So that's why I try to sing for my sister to celebrate her marriage so you can remember.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper pronoun use. Adding 'her' before 'marriage' specifies whose marriage, and 'so you can remember' is connected properly.