唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and make your sentences more concise and clear. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific examples to enrich your answer.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing a lot because in my family, we often sing traditional Cantonese songs together during special occasions like graduations and weddings. This tradition helps us cherish our family moments and strengthens our bonds.

建議: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure by using linking words. Be more specific about your future plans and reasons for wanting to learn singing.

範例: I haven't had the opportunity to learn singing because my parents encouraged me to focus on musical instruments instead. However, if possible, I would like to take singing lessons in the future to develop this skill.

建議: Make your answer more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. Provide clearer examples and avoid repetitive phrases.

範例: I want to sing for my parents because they used to sing lullabies and birthday songs for me during special occasions like my kindergarten graduation and birthdays. Singing for them would be a way to show my appreciation.

建議: Complete your sentences fully and avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

範例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness because music evokes positive emotions in people, no matter the genre. For example, I enjoy listening to Taylor Swift's songs as they help me feel relaxed and uplifted during stressful times.

× I like singing very much because umm, in my family culture, we always sing songs together in our language, which is Cantonese language to enjoy our precious family moments such as when people are graduating from our families or having wedding moments.

✓ I like singing very much because umm, in my family culture, we always sing songs together in our language, which is the Cantonese language, to enjoy our precious family moments such as when people are graduating from our families or having wedding moments.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Cantonese language' because it refers to a specific language known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' here is incorrect in English grammar.

× Unfortunately, I did not have a chance to learn how to sing because my parents guided me to learn musical instruments more than practicing in my singing talents.

✓ Unfortunately, I did not have a chance to learn how to sing because my parents guided me to learn musical instruments more than to practice my singing talents.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before 'my singing talents'. The correct form is to use the infinitive 'to practice' without 'in' to express the intended meaning.

× But in the future, if I have a chance, I would definitely pay to learn singing.

✓ But in the future, if I have a chance, I will definitely pay to learn singing.

When talking about a real possibility in the future, 'will' is the correct modal verb to use instead of 'would', which is conditional and less certain.

× because when I was small they always sing some baby lullabies and also some birthday songs for me during special occasions such as my graduation in kindergartens and also in every of my birthdays.

✓ because when I was small they always sang some baby lullabies and also some birthday songs for me during special occasions such as my graduation in kindergarten and also on every one of my birthdays.

The verb 'sing' should be in past tense 'sang' to match the past time frame 'when I was small'. Also, 'kindergartens' should be singular 'kindergarten' and 'in every of my birthdays' is incorrect; it should be 'on every one of my birthdays'.

× Definitely, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it is obviously that people enjoy much positive emotions from listening to different kinds of music, regardless of the genre.

✓ Definitely, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it is obvious that people enjoy many positive emotions from listening to different kinds of music, regardless of the genre.

The phrase 'it is obviously that' is incorrect; it should be 'it is obvious that'. Also, 'much positive emotions' is incorrect; 'many positive emotions' is correct because 'emotions' is countable.

× For myself, I really enjoy listening to Taylor Swift music because it helps me a lot when I.

✓ For myself, I really enjoy listening to Taylor Swift's music because it helps me a lot.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'when I'. Also, 'Taylor Swift music' should be 'Taylor Swift's music' to show possession. The corrected sentence removes the incomplete part and fixes the possessive form.