唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적으로 부정확한 부분이 많습니다. 문장을 명확하게 구성하고, 중복되는 표현을 줄이며, 자신의 감정을 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress and express my emotions effectively.

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문장이 길고 복잡하여 이해하기 어렵습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 자신의 경험을 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I have learned by listening to pop songs and watching tutorials on YouTube, which have helped me improve.

建議: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, 문장 연결이 자연스럽지 않고 약간 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 더 유창하게 만들고, 간결하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I would like to sing for my fiancé because we are planning to get married soon, and I think it would be a meaningful and special gift for him.

建議: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 논리적으로 연결되지 않아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 자신의 의견을 명확히 하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their positive emotions and connect with others.

× I do like singing because I think it's one of my talents and it is quite good at.

✓ I do like singing because I think it's one of my talents and I am quite good at it.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it is quite good at' without an object. The correct form is 'I am quite good at it' where 'am' is the verb and 'it' is the object of the preposition 'at'. This corrects the verb form and sentence structure.

× Decreasing my stress.

✓ It decreases my stress.

The original phrase is a fragment without a subject or verb. To form a complete sentence, a subject and verb are needed. 'It decreases my stress' correctly expresses the idea that singing reduces stress.

× It's quite good and impressing and expressing my feelings.

✓ It's quite good for impressing and expressing my feelings.

The adjective 'impressing' is incorrectly used; the gerund form should be used as an object of the preposition 'for'. Adding 'for' clarifies the purpose, and 'impressing' and 'expressing' function as gerunds here.

× Not really all of the pop songs or the playlists from my parents would be my teacher to sing, but I guess these days because there are so many media that shows how to sing such as YouTube and it would definitely help people to well improve their.

✓ Not really. All of the pop songs or the playlists from my parents would be my teachers to learn singing, but I guess these days, because there is so much media that shows how to sing, such as YouTube, it definitely helps people to improve well.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear structure and incorrect verb forms. 'Would be my teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'songs or playlists'. 'Media' is plural but treated as singular here; 'there is so much media' is more natural. The phrase 'help people to well improve their' is incomplete and awkward; corrected to 'helps people to improve well.' Proper punctuation and sentence division improve clarity.

× If I need to sing for someone, I would say it would be my fiance.

✓ If I need to sing for someone, I would say it would be my fiancé.

The word 'fiance' is missing the accent on the 'e' to correctly refer to a male engaged partner. Also, 'fiancé' is a noun and should be used as is; the sentence is otherwise correct.

× And because I'm considering to get married soon, I think it would be a very honorable gift for me, from me to him and it would be a very nice moment for us.

✓ And because I'm considering getting married soon, I think it would be a very honorable gift from me to him, and it would be a very nice moment for us.

The verb 'consider' is followed by a gerund, so 'considering to get married' should be 'considering getting married'. Also, 'a very honorable gift for me, from me to him' is redundant; 'a very honorable gift from me to him' is clearer.

× I do think so because the singing itself is a way to express their feelings.

✓ I do think so because singing itself is a way to express one's feelings.

The phrase 'the singing itself' is awkward; 'singing itself' is more natural. Also, 'their feelings' is vague; 'one's feelings' generalizes the statement appropriately.

× And if it's a positive way, I mean it could be a negative way for impressed expressing their feelings and although itself would kind of suit the people who are in a very.

✓ And if it's a positive way, I mean it could also be a negative way of impressing and expressing their feelings, and although it itself would kind of suit people who are in a very...

The phrase 'for impressed expressing' is incorrect; it should be 'of impressing and expressing'. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; 'it itself' is the correct reflexive pronoun usage here. The sentence ends abruptly, indicating incomplete thought.