唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần cải thiện về tính tự nhiên và sự mạch lạc. Bạn nên tránh dùng những cụm từ không chính xác như "healing reliever" và nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài, bạn nên cô đọng ý hơn trong khoảng 3-4 câu.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and connect with others. For instance, my friends and I often hold small concerts, which not only satisfy our passion but also strengthen our friendships.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh dùng những cụm từ không chính xác như "my voice shouldn't allow me to sing in turn". Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích rõ ràng.

範例: I have tried to learn singing before, but I found it difficult because my voice was not strong enough. However, I still hope to improve and enjoy singing in the future.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên và hơi khó hiểu. Bạn nên dùng các cụm từ phổ biến hơn và giải thích rõ hơn về lý do bạn thích hát một mình. Đồng thời, nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I prefer to sing alone because I am quite shy. Singing by myself helps me express my feelings without worrying about others' opinions.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng, ví dụ như "faltering fostering" và "emerge" không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh. Bạn nên dùng từ vựng đơn giản, chính xác và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn.

範例: I think singing can make people happy, but it depends on their music preferences. Some like upbeat songs that boost their energy, while others prefer calm music to relax and feel peaceful.

× I am an avid music lover, especially kinds of music that are really upbeat.

✓ I am an avid music lover, especially kinds of music that are really upbeat.

The phrase 'especially kinds of music' is awkward because 'kinds' is plural but not properly connected. It should be 'especially the kinds of music' or 'especially music that is really upbeat.' However, since the instruction is to correct only mistakes that meet the grammar problem types, and 'kinds' plural is acceptable here, no correction is needed.

× singing is not only a healing reliever, but also can give me a sense of community.

✓ singing is not only a healing reliever, but also gives me a sense of community.

The verb phrase after 'but also' should be parallel to the first part. 'Can give' is not parallel to 'is'. The correct form is 'but also gives' to maintain parallel structure and subject-verb agreement.

× my friends and I have some small concerts not only satisfy our passions, but also allow us to have daily conversations.

✓ my friends and I have some small concerts that not only satisfy our passions, but also allow us to have daily conversations.

The sentence lacks a relative pronoun 'that' to connect 'concerts' with the verbs 'satisfy' and 'allow'. Without 'that', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I have tried a lot of tones from singing voice to upbeat voice, but I gave up a bit.

✓ I have tried a lot of tones from singing voice to upbeat voice, but I gave up a bit.

The past tense 'gave up' is correct here because the action is completed in the past. No correction needed.

× my voice shouldn't allow me to sing in turn or I can know what it turned off.

✓ my voice doesn't allow me to sing in turn, or I can tell when it turns off.

'Shouldn't' is incorrect here because it expresses obligation or advice, which is not intended. The correct modal verb is 'doesn't' to indicate inability. Also, 'know what it turned off' is awkward; 'tell when it turns off' is clearer.

× So I'm looking forward to seeing to have a blast.

✓ So I'm looking forward to having a blast.

The phrase 'looking forward to' should be followed by a noun or gerund. 'Seeing to have a blast' is incorrect structure. The correct form is 'looking forward to having a blast.'

× Honestly, I want to sing my heart out with myself.

✓ Honestly, I want to sing my heart out by myself.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used with the preposition 'with'. The correct preposition is 'by' to indicate doing something alone.

× Some individuals or addicted to upbeat music because of faltering fostering their spirit and feel energized.

✓ Some individuals are addicted to upbeat music because it fosters their spirit and makes them feel energized.

The sentence has incorrect preposition and verb forms. 'Or' should be 'are'. 'Because of faltering fostering' is incorrect; it should be 'because it fosters'. Also, 'feel energized' needs a subject 'them' and verb 'makes' to be correct.

× For others, true music is their cup of tea because they want to emerge and relax in their own world.

✓ For others, true music is their cup of tea because they want to immerse themselves and relax in their own world.

The verb 'emerge' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'immerse'. Also, 'immerse' requires a reflexive pronoun 'themselves' to be correct.