唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Jawaban Anda sudah menyampaikan alasan mengapa Anda suka bernyanyi, tetapi kalimatnya kurang natural dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan menggunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan perasaan Anda.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me release my energy and relieve stress. I often sing karaoke alone, which makes me feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tidak terstruktur dengan baik. Sebaiknya jawab langsung dengan kalimat yang jelas dan lengkap, serta hindari kalimat yang tidak selesai atau membingungkan.

範例: I haven't taken any formal singing lessons, but I did attend an art class at school where I learned some basic singing techniques.

建議: Jawaban Anda sudah menyampaikan pendapat pribadi, namun kalimatnya kurang natural dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan menggunakan kosakata yang tepat.

範例: I prefer singing for myself because I find it therapeutic and it helps me relax.

建議: Jawaban Anda sudah menyampaikan pendapat dengan jelas, tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat yang kurang lancar. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan kosakata yang tepat untuk menyampaikan ide Anda.

範例: I am 100% sure that singing brings happiness to people. It helps them enjoy life and relieve stress, so I think everyone should try singing.

× Yes, I love singing because it helps me to burst out my energy.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it helps me to release my energy.

The phrase 'burst out my energy' is incorrect. The correct verb phrase is 'release my energy' or 'let out my energy'. 'Burst out' is not used with 'energy' in this context.

× I can outlet my pressure, my stress out from myself by singing.

✓ I can let out my pressure and stress from myself by singing.

The word 'outlet' is a noun, not a verb. The correct verb phrase is 'let out'. Also, 'stress out from myself' is incorrect; it should be 'stress from myself' or better 'my stress'.

× Doing some karaoke.

✓ I do some karaoke.

'Doing some karaoke' is a sentence fragment without a subject. It should be a complete sentence with a subject and verb, e.g., 'I do some karaoke.'

× If I do it alone, I can feel it there.

✓ If I do it alone, I can feel it there.

This sentence is unclear and awkward. A better sentence would be 'If I do it alone, I can feel the effect.' However, since the instruction is to only correct grammar mistakes from the list, no change is made here.

× For a serious thing like inappropriate course I can say I haven't do that, but when I was in my school there's an art subject and I attended it and maybe for.

✓ For a serious thing like an inappropriate course, I can say I haven't done that, but when I was in school, there was an art subject and I attended it.

The phrase 'I haven't do that' is incorrect; it should be 'I haven't done that' (past participle). Also, 'there's' should be 'there was' to match past tense. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; the last part 'and maybe for' is unclear and omitted for clarity.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

The question is correct; no correction needed.

× I think I really like singing for myself because I found it some therapeutic for me to do a singing thing.

✓ I think I really like singing for myself because I find it somewhat therapeutic to sing.

The phrase 'I found it some therapeutic' is incorrect; it should be 'I find it somewhat therapeutic'. Also, 'to do a singing thing' is awkward; 'to sing' is better.

× 100% I believe people who singing will find some enjoyment in their life, will relieve their stress more relaxed.

✓ 100% I believe people who sing will find some enjoyment in their life and will relieve their stress and feel more relaxed.

The phrase 'people who singing' is incorrect; it should be 'people who sing' (base form after 'who'). Also, 'will relieve their stress more relaxed' is incorrect; it should be 'will relieve their stress and feel more relaxed'.

× I think people should try to sing.

✓ I think people should try to sing.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.