唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp và tránh lỗi sai như "Just I realize singing" hay "when I'm take a bath". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ, bạn có thể bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax. For instance, I often sing while taking a bath or when I want to refresh my mind after a stressful day.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì động từ cho phù hợp và tránh lặp từ như "I I". Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn với cấu trúc câu mạch lạc, sử dụng từ nối để liên kết ý. Hãy trình bày câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích lý do học hát và mục đích cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child because my voice was not very good. I wanted to improve it so that I could perform confidently in front of others during school events.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng từ nối như "firstly", "after that" một cách chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "I want to give a song I sing for my mother". Bạn nên trình bày ý chính rõ ràng, giải thích lý do và kế hoạch cụ thể.

範例: Firstly, I want to sing a meaningful song for my mother, so I need to practice a lot. After that, I would like to perform for everyone in my class.

建議: Bạn cần hoàn thiện câu trả lời và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "rely stress" hay câu chưa kết thúc. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn với ví dụ rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, I always listen to songs when I feel unhappy, and it helps me feel better.

× Just I realize singing and I usually sing during all my free time.

✓ I just realize singing and I usually sing during all my free time.

The subject 'I' should come before the adverb 'just' in this sentence to follow correct English word order rules.

× For example I usually singing when I'm take a bath or when I have straight to relax and refresh.

✓ For example, I usually sing when I take a bath or when I have time to relax and refresh.

The verb 'singing' should be in base form 'sing' after 'usually'. Also, 'I'm take' is incorrect; it should be 'I take'. 'Have straight' is incorrect; it should be 'have time'.

× Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child because my voice was not too good and I want to improve it and at that I I want to perform confidently in front of others during school events.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child because my voice was not too good and I wanted to improve it and at that time I wanted to perform confidently in front of others during school events.

The verbs 'want' should be in past tense 'wanted' to match the past context of the sentence. Also, 'at that' should be 'at that time' for clarity.

× Firstly, I want to give a song I sing for my mother.

✓ Firstly, I want to sing a song for my mother.

The phrase 'give a song I sing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'sing a song'.

× It's maybe a very meaningful song and I have to train so much time and after that I want to perform to everyone in my class.

✓ It may be a very meaningful song and I have to train a lot of times and after that I want to perform for everyone in my class.

'It's maybe' should be 'It may be'. 'So much time' is better expressed as 'a lot of times'. The preposition 'to' after 'perform' should be 'for'. Also, 'train so much time' is awkward; 'train a lot' or 'practice a lot' is better.

× Yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to everyone because it allows people to express all their emotion and rely stress.

✓ Yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to everyone because it allows people to express all their emotions and relieve stress.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. The verb 'rely' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'relieve' to mean reduce stress.

× For example, I always listen a song when I unhappy and.

✓ For example, I always listen to a song when I am unhappy.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'I unhappy' is missing the verb 'am'. The sentence was incomplete and needed correction.