唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, instead of repeating 'singing helps me to express my emotions' and 'communicate feelings', you can merge these ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing because I started when I was five, and it helps me express my emotions and share my feelings with others.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words like 'also' and 'because'. Use linking words properly and make your sentences clearer and more concise.

範例: Yes, my mother taught me how to sing, and I enjoy it because it allows me to express my feelings and control my voice clearly.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear pronouns. Use correct pronouns and improve sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually sing for my mother because she enjoys it, and at school, I often perform for my classmates when they ask me to showcase my talent.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use specific examples. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'where they can finally express the other people'.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music is popular worldwide and allows songwriters and singers to express emotions that connect with many people.

× I started singing since I was 5 and singing helps me to express my emotions and to show the other people the talent that I have.

✓ I have been singing since I was 5, and singing helps me to express my emotions and to show other people the talent that I have.

The phrase 'started singing since' is incorrect because 'since' requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that began in the past and continues to the present. Use 'have been singing' instead of 'started singing' with 'since'. Also, 'the other people' should be 'other people' as it refers to people in general.

× And also in singing it helps me to communicate with the feelings that I wanted to share to everyone.

✓ Also, singing helps me to communicate the feelings that I want to share with everyone.

The preposition 'with' is used to indicate sharing feelings 'with' someone, not 'to'. Also, 'wanted' should be 'want' to match the present tense context. The phrase 'in singing' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× Yes, I've learned how to sing, my mother taught me how and also also I'm having fun of singing because of learning how to sing because it it is where I can express my feelings and control my voice clearly.

✓ Yes, I've learned how to sing; my mother taught me, and I also have fun singing because learning how to sing allows me to express my feelings and control my voice clearly.

The phrase 'I'm having fun of singing' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I have fun singing'. Also, 'because it it is where' is redundant and awkward; rephrasing improves clarity. The sentence is long and needs punctuation for better structure.

× Sometimes I usually sing for my mother because he loves me to sing for her and also when I am in school I usually sing for the people, the students of that school where they ask me to perform and show the talent what I have.

✓ Sometimes I usually sing for my mother because she loves me to sing for her, and also when I am in school, I usually sing for the people, the students of that school who ask me to perform and show the talent that I have.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect when referring to 'my mother'; it should be 'she'. Also, 'where they ask me' should be 'who ask me' because 'who' refers to people. The phrase 'show the talent what I have' should be 'show the talent that I have' for correct relative clause usage.

× Yes, probably singing can bring happiness to people especially nowadays that music are very known worldwide, especially for the music writers and where they can finally express the other people or it is where they decide.

✓ Yes, probably singing can bring happiness to people, especially nowadays when music is very well known worldwide, especially for music writers who can finally express themselves or decide their path.

The noun 'music' is uncountable and singular, so it should be 'music is' not 'music are'. The phrase 'the other people' is unclear and awkward; 'themselves' is more appropriate. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity.