唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'first flight' ควรเป็น 'first prize' และใช้ tense ให้เหมาะสม นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

範例: I have been passionate about singing since primary school. For example, I once joined a charity singing contest and won first prize. Since then, I have truly enjoyed performing in front of others.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น 'in like a real class' ควรเป็น 'in a formal class' และลดการใช้คำซ้ำ เช่น 'I think' นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหล

範例: I have never learned to sing in a formal class, but I started singing by myself when I was five years old. Therefore, I believe that enjoying singing is more important than formal training.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและไวยากรณ์ เช่น 'stage fright' ควรใช้ 'not feeling stage fright' และ 'watching at me' ควรเป็น 'watching me' รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลและชัดเจนของประโยค

範例: It depends on the situation. Most of the time, I sing for myself. However, I can sing for other people if I am not feeling stage fright when many people are watching me.

建議: คำตอบดีมากแล้ว แต่ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'belting out song' ควรเป็น 'belting out songs' และ 'music remained' ควรเป็น 'music has remained' เพื่อความถูกต้องของ tense และเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

範例: Yes, definitely. Singing has brought happiness to people for centuries, which is why music has remained a universal source of joy today. Whether belting out songs with friends at a concert or humming a tune alone, singing can uplift our spirits and create a sense of connection.

× I once joined a charity singing contest and won first flight and ever since then I've truly enjoy performing.

✓ I once joined a charity singing contest and won first prize and ever since then I've truly enjoyed performing.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in the past participle form 'enjoyed' to correctly follow the present perfect tense 'I've'. Also, 'first flight' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'first prize'.

× I've never learned how to sing in like a real class but I've started singing by myself since I was like 5 years old so I think it's not important to learn truly but I think just enjoy singing is enough for me.

✓ I've never learned how to sing in a real class but I've been singing by myself since I was about 5 years old so I think it's not truly important to learn but I think just enjoying singing is enough for me.

The phrase 'I've started singing' is incorrect for an action continuing from the past to present; 'I've been singing' is appropriate. 'Like a real class' should be 'a real class'. 'Just enjoy singing' should be 'just enjoying singing' to function as a gerund after 'think'.

× It depends on the situations.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The word 'situations' is plural but the phrase 'depends on' usually refers to a singular or general condition here, so 'situation' is more appropriate.

× Most of the time I think for myself, but I think I can sing for other people as well if I'm not stage fright when there are a lot of people watching at me.

✓ Most of the time I sing for myself, but I think I can sing for other people as well if I'm not stage-frightened when there are a lot of people watching me.

'I think for myself' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'I sing for myself'. 'I'm not stage fright' is incorrect; the adjective form 'stage-frightened' is needed. 'Watching at me' should be 'watching me' without 'at'. Also, 'stage-frightened' is the correct adjective form to describe the feeling.

× Whether it's belting out song with friends at a concert or humming a tune alone, singing can uplift our spirits and create a sense of connection.

✓ Whether it's belting out songs with friends at a concert or humming a tune alone, singing can uplift our spirits and create a sense of connection.

The noun 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match the context of singing multiple songs with friends.