唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas clearly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason or example using linking words like 'because' or 'when'.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy. Although I am not a good singer, I enjoy listening to music and singing along with my favorite songs.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about your plans or hopes.

範例: I have never learned how to sing professionally, but I hope to take singing lessons in the future. I also want to enjoy singing with my friends during our free time.

建議: Your answer is understandable but a bit confusing. Try to use clearer sentences and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'when' to explain your ideas. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: I want to sing for my children when they are young. For example, I will sing lullabies to help them fall asleep.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but the sentences are a bit awkward and unclear. Try to use more natural expressions and organize your thoughts logically. Use linking words like 'especially' and 'because' to explain your reasons clearly.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people, especially when you sing with your family or friends. Singing helps express emotions and creates a feeling of comfort and relaxation.

× Yes, I like singing, but I have not sound but I need to be singer.

✓ Yes, I like singing, but I have no sound and I need to be a singer.

The phrase 'have not sound' is incorrect because 'have' should be followed by a noun or past participle. Here, 'no sound' is the correct noun phrase. Also, 'be singer' lacks the article 'a' before 'singer'. The correct form is 'I have no sound and I need to be a singer.'

× But I like when I listen some musics, when I listen when someone is singing, so it's so pleasant for me.

✓ But I like it when I listen to some music, when I listen to someone singing, so it's very pleasant for me.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'musics' is incorrect; 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. The phrase 'so it's so pleasant' is better as 'so it's very pleasant' for clarity.

× I have never learned how to sing, but I hope, I don't know when, but I hope that I will learn how to sing and I will make some time with my friends with Pleasant.

✓ I have never learned how to sing, but I hope, I don't know when, that I will learn how to sing and I will make some time with my friends pleasantly.

The phrase 'make some time with my friends with Pleasant' is awkward and incorrect. 'Pleasant' is an adjective and cannot be used as an adverb here. The correct adverb form is 'pleasantly'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing the repeated 'but I hope'.

× Oh, to be honest, I wouldn't stop singing for my daughter or son or my son when they will be a child.

✓ Oh, to be honest, I wouldn't stop singing for my daughter or son when they are children.

The phrase 'when they will be a child' is incorrect because in time clauses with 'when', the present tense is used instead of 'will'. Also, 'a child' should be plural 'children' to match 'they'.

× When they need to sleep, I will try to sleep them with my music.

✓ When they need to sleep, I will try to put them to sleep with my music.

The verb 'sleep' is intransitive and cannot take a direct object like 'them'. The correct expression is 'put them to sleep'. This corrects the pronoun usage and verb structure.

× I think that singer can bring happiness to people, especially when you're singing with your favorite person, with your family or with your friends, in yourself, in your body something express happiness, comfort and relax.

✓ I think that a singer can bring happiness to people, especially when you're singing with your favorite person, with your family or with your friends; inside yourself and your body, something expresses happiness, comfort, and relaxation.

The noun 'singer' needs the article 'a' to be correct. The phrase 'in yourself, in your body something express' is ungrammatical; it should be 'inside yourself and your body, something expresses'. Also, 'relax' should be the noun 'relaxation' to match the list of nouns. The sentence is corrected for singular/plural and article usage.