唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words and focus on clarity.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially when I want to relax. Singing helps me feel less stressed and more peaceful.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Make sure to respond directly and clearly. Use correct grammar and avoid unnecessary repetition. Provide specific details to support your answer.

範例: No, I never took singing lessons as a child. My mom wanted me to learn, but I was never interested. I usually just sing casually at home, like in the bathroom.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I usually sing for myself because I enjoy it. However, if I sing for someone, it would be my wife, even though I don't think my singing is very good, she enjoys it.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to avoid filler words and redundancy. Provide a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and examples, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and feel comfortable. When people are happy, they often want to sing, which further improves their mood.

× Yes, I would like to sing often but not regularly when I additionally when I I mean relax mood, I like to sing singing because I believe singing makes me more relapse and make me tension free.

✓ Yes, I would like to sing often but not regularly. When I am in a relaxed mood, I like singing because I believe singing makes me more relaxed and relieves my tension.

The original sentence misuses the verb forms and has awkward phrasing. 'Sing singing' is redundant; 'like singing' is correct. 'Relapse' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'relaxed'. Also, 'make me tension free' should be 'relieves my tension' for natural expression.

× No, actually I haven't learned how to sing in childhood.

✓ No, actually I didn't learn how to sing in childhood.

The phrase 'haven't learned' is present perfect, which is not appropriate with the specific past time 'in childhood'. The simple past 'didn't learn' should be used for completed actions in the past.

× My mom wanted her to tease me how to sing, but I never feel that.

✓ My mom wanted to teach me how to sing, but I never felt that.

'Her' is incorrect here; the subject should be 'to teach me'. Also, 'tease' is a wrong word choice; 'teach' is correct. 'Feel' should be in past tense 'felt' to match the past context.

× Never felt that.

✓ I never felt that.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'I' makes it a complete sentence. Also, 'felt' is correct past tense form.

× I'm actually I'm a bathroom singer.

✓ Actually, I'm a bathroom singer.

The sentence has redundant 'I'm'. Removing the repetition improves clarity and correctness.

× I don't want to sing for anyone but for myself. Additionally, if I sing for anyone, I think I believe it's why it is my wife and she.

✓ I don't want to sing for anyone but myself. Additionally, if I sing for anyone, I think it would be my wife.

'For myself' is correct instead of 'for myself'. The phrase 'I think I believe it's why it is my wife and she' is confusing and incorrect; simplifying to 'I think it would be my wife' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× My singing is not so much enjoyable, but I think she.

✓ My singing is not very enjoyable, but I think she likes it.

The phrase 'not so much enjoyable' is awkward; 'not very enjoyable' is better. The sentence 'but I think she' is incomplete; adding 'likes it' completes the thought.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people uh, because singing makes people more relaxed and comfortable when people are in enjoyable mood, they want to sing, sing uh, so singing makes additionally singing, singing makes a person more relaxed and.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because singing makes people more relaxed and comfortable. When people are in an enjoyable mood, they want to sing. So, singing makes a person more relaxed.

The original sentence is repetitive and contains unnecessary filler words. Removing repeated words and filler sounds improves clarity. Also, 'in enjoyable mood' should be 'in an enjoyable mood' to include the article.