唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors to improve clarity.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing very much because it allows me to express my emotions. I like listening to songs from various languages, especially since Nepal has 125 different languages. This diversity helps me appreciate different cultures through music.

建議: Provide a clear and structured response by starting with a direct answer, then explain with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes.

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was a child, my sister used to sing, and listening to her made me very happy. Therefore, I learned many singing techniques from her over time.

建議: Make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words to make your response more coherent.

範例: I want to sing for my family because they are very important to me. They enjoy my singing, so I often dedicate songs to them to show my love and appreciation.

建議: Focus on delivering a clear and grammatically correct answer. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it allows us to express our feelings to others. For example, many singers dedicate songs to their loved ones, which can uplift their spirits.

× I like varieties of song.

✓ I like varieties of songs.

The noun 'song' should be plural 'songs' because 'varieties' implies multiple types, so the noun it modifies should also be plural.

× I also do listen a lot of songs from different rituals or language.

✓ I also listen to a lot of songs from different regions or languages.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, 'rituals' is incorrect in this context; 'regions' or 'languages' is appropriate.

× There are altogether 125 languages in our Nepal and I am I listen a lot of songs from various kinds of language and.

✓ There are altogether 125 languages in Nepal, and I listen to a lot of songs from various kinds of languages.

The phrase 'in our Nepal' is incorrect; 'in Nepal' is correct. Also, 'I am I listen' is ungrammatical and should be 'I listen to'. The noun 'language' should be plural 'languages' to match 'various kinds'.

× Yes, I have learned on how to sing because I when I was a child my sister used to sing and when I hear a song from her I felt very happy And I I have learned of I have learned so many singing things from my sister.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing because when I was a child my sister used to sing, and when I heard a song from her, I felt very happy. I have learned many singing techniques from my sister.

The phrase 'have learned on how to sing' is incorrect; 'have learned how to sing' is correct. The verb 'hear' should be in past tense 'heard' to match 'felt'. The phrase 'I have learned of I have learned so many singing things' is redundant and ungrammatical; it should be simplified. 'Singing things' is vague; 'singing techniques' is clearer.

× I want to sing for my family because family is the main thing in this whole world and they also like me when I sing a song for them and I always usually do dedicate the song for them and sing a song for them.

✓ I want to sing for my family because family is the most important thing in the whole world, and they also like it when I sing a song for them. I usually dedicate songs to them and sing for them.

The phrase 'main thing' is better expressed as 'most important thing'. The phrase 'like me when I sing a song' is incorrect; it should be 'like it when I sing a song'. The phrase 'do dedicate the song for them' should be 'dedicate songs to them'. Repetition of 'sing a song for them' is redundant.

× Yes, of course, singing has a singing has bring the happiness in face of the people because we can also, we can also dedicate our feelings towards towards another person through singing.

✓ Yes, of course, singing has brought happiness to people's faces because we can also dedicate our feelings towards another person through singing.

The verb 'bring' should be in past participle form 'brought' after 'has'. The phrase 'in face of the people' is incorrect; 'to people's faces' is correct. The repeated phrase 'we can also' should be simplified. The repeated preposition 'towards' should appear only once.