唱歌— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you like singing? Why?
考生
Oh I love this question. Singing makes me feel relaxed and happy at the same time. It reduces my stress and it makes me more creative about using emotions in our voice.
考官
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
考生
Yes, I've learned how to sing. It's first you have to warm up your vocal cords and then you have to open your mouth when you sing because it will makes your sound more wide open. I mean like that so you can make a sound loud and clear.
考官
Who do you want to sing for?
考生
I would love to sing for myself because I want to improve my singing and impress myself from not knowing how to sing at first, not knowing how to control your own voice, to becoming a professional.
考官
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
考生
Yes, when the singer expressed the I mean like joy emotions, they will make people feel less tired and more happier. So they could be laughing, dancing or whatever, because there's so many types of music that can make people feel that way.
評估
總分
Part 1
Do you like singing? Why?
分數: 75.0建議: คำตอบของคุณดีที่แสดงความรู้สึกส่วนตัวและเหตุผล แต่ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้ประโยคที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น "Oh I love this question" และควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้คำตอบลื่นไหลมากขึ้น เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so'. นอกจากนี้ ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่หลากหลายและถูกต้อง เช่น 'expressing emotions' แทน 'using emotions'.
範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and feel happy. Moreover, it reduces my stress and allows me to express my emotions more creatively through my voice.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
分數: 70.0建議: คำตอบของคุณมีข้อมูลที่ดีเกี่ยวกับการร้องเพลง แต่ควรปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น การใช้คำเชื่อม 'First' และ 'then' ควรใช้รูปแบบประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำพูดไม่เป็นทางการ เช่น 'I mean like that'.
範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. First, you need to warm up your vocal cords. Then, you should open your mouth wide when singing because it helps produce a louder and clearer sound.
Who do you want to sing for?
分數: 65.0建議: คำตอบนี้มีความตั้งใจดี แต่ควรปรับให้ประโยคชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้คำเชื่อมและการจัดลำดับความคิดให้ดีขึ้น รวมถึงการใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'impress myself' อาจเปลี่ยนเป็น 'see my own progress'.
範例: I would love to sing for myself because I want to improve my skills and see my own progress, from not knowing how to control my voice to becoming a professional singer.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
分數: 60.0建議: คำตอบนี้ควรปรับปรุงเรื่องความชัดเจนและการใช้คำเชื่อม รวมถึงการใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'expressed joy' แทน 'expressed the I mean like joy emotions' และควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดไม่เป็นทางการ เช่น 'or whatever'.
範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When a singer expresses joyful emotions, it can make listeners feel more energetic and cheerful, encouraging them to laugh or dance. Different types of music can evoke these positive feelings.
文法
× It reduces my stress and it makes me more creative about using emotions in our voice.
✓ It reduces my stress and makes me more creative in using emotions in my voice.
The phrase 'makes me more creative about using' is awkward; 'creative in using' is the correct collocation. Also, 'our voice' should be 'my voice' to match the speaker's perspective.
× It's first you have to warm up your vocal cords and then you have to open your mouth when you sing because it will makes your sound more wide open.
✓ First, you have to warm up your vocal cords and then you have to open your mouth when you sing because it will make your sound wider.
The phrase 'It will makes' is incorrect; 'will' should be followed by the base verb 'make'. Also, 'more wide open' is incorrect; 'wider' is the correct comparative adjective here.
× I mean like that so you can make a sound loud and clear.
✓ I mean like that so you can make the sound loud and clear.
The phrase 'a sound loud and clear' is incorrect; 'the sound' is appropriate here because it refers to a specific sound being produced.
× I would love to sing for myself because I want to improve my singing and impress myself from not knowing how to sing at first, not knowing how to control your own voice, to becoming a professional.
✓ I would love to sing for myself because I want to improve my singing and impress myself by going from not knowing how to sing at first, not knowing how to control my own voice, to becoming a professional.
The sentence mixes pronouns 'myself' and 'your own voice'; it should be consistent using 'my own voice' to match the speaker's perspective. Also, 'impress myself from' is incorrect; 'impress myself by going from' is better.
× Yes, when the singer expressed the I mean like joy emotions, they will make people feel less tired and more happier.
✓ Yes, when the singer expresses joyful emotions, they make people feel less tired and happier.
The phrase 'expressed the I mean like joy emotions' is ungrammatical and unclear; it should be 'expresses joyful emotions'. Also, 'more happier' is incorrect; 'happier' alone is correct.
× So they could be laughing, dancing or whatever, because there's so many types of music that can make people feel that way.
✓ So they could be laughing, dancing, or whatever, because there are so many types of music that can make people feel that way.
The phrase 'there's so many types' is incorrect; 'there are so many types' is correct because 'types' is plural.
'/%3e%3c/svg%3e)