唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบของคุณดีที่แสดงความรู้สึกส่วนตัวและเหตุผล แต่ควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'feelings' แทน 'feeling' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'only way' และ 'make me feel better' ควรเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

範例: Yes, I like singing because it is the best way to express my feelings. Whenever I feel stressed, singing helps me relax and improve my mood.

建議: คำตอบมีข้อมูลที่ดีแต่ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'I wanted' แทน 'I want' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'singing skills' และ 'confidence skills' ควรเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหลและใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น 'because'

範例: When I was young, I took singing classes because I wanted to improve my singing ability and boost my confidence. My mom encouraged me to attend these lessons.

建議: ควรใช้ภาษาอย่างเป็นทางการมากขึ้น เช่น 'want to' แทน 'wanna' และใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'They are my biggest supporters' นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

範例: I want to sing for my family because they are my biggest supporters. They always stand by me and help me build my confidence.

建議: คำตอบมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น 'seeing' แทน 'singing' และ 'can helps' ควรแก้ไขให้ถูกต้องและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจน นอกจากนี้ควรเพิ่มคำเชื่อมและรายละเอียดเพื่อความสมบูรณ์ของคำตอบ

範例: Of course, singing can bring a lot of happiness to people because it helps them express their feelings and feel better when they are down.

× Singing is the best way to express my feeling.

✓ Singing is the best way to express my feelings.

The word 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' because it refers to multiple emotions or states, not just one. In English, when talking about emotions in general, the plural form is commonly used.

× Whenever I stress, singing is the only way to make me feel better.

✓ Whenever I am stressed, singing is the only way to make me feel better.

The verb 'stress' is incorrectly used as a verb here. The correct form is 'am stressed' to indicate the state of feeling stress. Using the modal verb 'am' with the past participle 'stressed' forms the correct passive state.

× When I was young, I took a class of singing because I want to improve my singing skills and I want to improve my confidence skills too.

✓ When I was young, I took a singing class because I wanted to improve my singing skills and my confidence too.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action happened in the past, 'want' should be changed to 'wanted' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'a class of singing' is better expressed as 'a singing class'. 'Confidence skills' is incorrect; 'confidence' alone is sufficient.

× So my mom took me to learn a singing lesson.

✓ So my mom took me to a singing lesson.

The phrase 'to learn a singing lesson' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' followed by the noun phrase 'a singing lesson'. The verb 'learn' is unnecessary here because 'lesson' already implies learning.

× I wanna sing for my family 'cause they're the big supporter of me.

✓ I wanna sing for my family because they're my biggest supporters.

The phrase 'big supporter of me' is incorrect. The correct form is 'my biggest supporters' to show possession and plural agreement with 'family'. Also, 'wanna' is informal; 'want to' is preferred in formal speech.

× They always, they always be my back.

✓ They are always my back.

The phrase 'be my back' is incorrect. The correct idiom is 'have my back', meaning to support someone. Also, the sentence is repetitive and should be simplified.

× They always help me improve my confidence and everything.

✓ They always help me improve my confidence and everything else.

The phrase 'and everything' is vague. Adding 'else' clarifies that it includes other things beyond confidence. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× Of course, singing can bring a lot of happiness to other people because seeing can help people when they feel down, seeing can performance or singing can helps people to express their feeling.

✓ Of course, singing can bring a lot of happiness to other people because singing can help people when they feel down; singing can perform or help people express their feelings.

The word 'seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'. 'Can helps' is incorrect; it should be 'can help' because modal verbs are followed by the base form of the verb. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to refer to emotions generally. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.