唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to be more direct and natural. For example, say you enjoy listening to music because it helps you relax and reduce stress. Avoid mentioning 'research' unless you explain it clearly. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

範例: I don't usually sing, but I enjoy listening to music because it helps me relax and reduces my stress levels.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear expressions like 'feel sophisticated'. Try to use simple and clear language. For example, say you used to sing in childhood but now you feel shy to sing in front of others. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, I used to sing a lot when I was a child, but now I feel shy to sing in front of others.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more fluent and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, explain why your parents are important and how singing for them would express your gratitude.

範例: If I had the chance, I would sing for my parents because they have always put my needs before theirs. Singing for them would be my way of showing gratitude for their sacrifices.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and repetitions. Try to organize your ideas logically and use simple sentences. For example, say singing can bring happiness because it boosts confidence and helps people relax. Also, mention singing therapy briefly and clearly.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it boosts our confidence and helps us feel relaxed. In fact, singing is even used as therapy in some medical treatments.

× Honestly speaking, I don't sing music but I like to listen the music because it is a research that whenever we listen to music, we get stressed out and feel relaxed.

✓ Honestly speaking, I don't sing music but I like to listen to music because there is research that whenever we listen to music, we get stressed out and feel relaxed.

The phrase 'listen the music' is incorrect; the verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'it is a research' is incorrect because 'research' is uncountable and should be used without 'a'. The correct phrase is 'there is research'.

× Yeah, of course in my childhood I used to sing a lot of songs, but now in the present time, I am very shy to singing songs because I feel sophisticated or like shy while singing songs.

✓ Yeah, of course in my childhood I used to sing a lot of songs, but now at present, I am very shy to sing songs because I feel awkward or shy while singing songs.

The phrase 'shy to singing' is incorrect; after 'shy', the infinitive form 'to sing' should be used, not the gerund 'singing'. Also, 'feel sophisticated or like shy' is awkward; 'feel awkward or shy' is more appropriate. 'In the present time' is better expressed as 'at present'.

× If I have given a chance to sing for, I would definitely sing for my parents because they are the first priority in this world because they sacrifice their needs and hobbies for the sake of other.

✓ If I were given a chance to sing, I would definitely sing for my parents because they are my first priority in this world as they sacrifice their needs and hobbies for the sake of others.

The conditional sentence is incorrect; 'If I have given' should be 'If I were given' to express a hypothetical situation. 'Sing for' is repeated unnecessarily. 'First priority' should be 'my first priority'. 'For the sake of other' should be 'for the sake of others' (plural).

× Yes, of course I believe that singing is you can believe happiness because most of the persons in is taking a taking up, preferring singing because singing helps us to boost our confidence.

✓ Yes, of course I believe that singing can bring happiness because most people are taking up or preferring singing as it helps us boost our confidence.

The phrase 'singing is you can believe happiness' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'singing can bring happiness'. 'Most of the persons in is taking a taking up' is grammatically incorrect; 'most people are taking up' is correct. 'Helps us to boost' is better as 'helps us boost'.

× We feel relaxed on on cloud 9 elevated while singing songs.

✓ We feel relaxed and elevated on cloud nine while singing songs.

The phrase 'on on cloud 9 elevated' is incorrect; 'on cloud nine' is the correct idiom meaning very happy. 'Elevated' should be connected properly, so 'relaxed and elevated on cloud nine' is correct.