唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách rõ ràng và mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp hơn.

範例: Honestly, I don't enjoy singing because I feel I lack talent in this area. However, sometimes I sing to express my emotions.

建議: Bạn trả lời khá đầy đủ nhưng câu trả lời có thể được cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và dùng từ chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ như 'study' nhiều lần.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. In music class, we studied rhythm, singing techniques, and musical notes.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để ý tưởng được truyền đạt hiệu quả.

範例: I don't have a specific person to sing for, but if I had to choose, it would be my mom.

建議: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng câu có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng chưa chính xác. Nên dùng từ phù hợp hơn như 'entertainment' nên là 'be entertained' hoặc 'enjoy themselves'. Sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and enjoy themselves.

× I don't really like to sing because I think I don't have talent in this path and whenever I want to sing because just because I want to show out my emotionals.

✓ I don't really like singing because I think I don't have talent in this path and whenever I want to sing, it's just because I want to show my emotions.

The phrase 'like to sing' is grammatically correct but 'like singing' is more natural in this context. The phrase 'just because I want to show out my emotionals' is incorrect; 'show out' is not appropriate here, and 'emotionals' is not a noun. It should be 'show my emotions'. Also, a comma is needed before 'because' to separate clauses properly.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing when I was in primary school.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school.

The use of present perfect 'have learned' is incorrect with a specific past time 'when I was in primary school'. Simple past 'learned' should be used to indicate a completed action in the past.

× We have music class and in that class we can study about the rhythm, how to sing and study about the notes.

✓ We have music class and in that class we can study rhythm, how to sing, and study the notes.

The preposition 'about' is unnecessary after 'study'. We say 'study rhythm' and 'study the notes' without 'about'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I don't have any person. I don't have any exactly person that I want to sing for, but to to have to be seen for. I think that would be my mom.

✓ I don't have any particular person that I want to sing for, but if I had to choose, I think that would be my mom.

'Any person' is unnatural; 'any particular person' or 'anyone' is better. The phrase 'to to have to be seen for' is unclear and incorrect. It is corrected to 'if I had to choose' to express the intended meaning. Pronouns and sentence structure are adjusted for clarity.

× Yeah, I I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because they can relax or entertainment through singing.

✓ Yeah, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because they can relax or be entertained through singing.

The phrase 'or entertainment' is incorrect; it should be 'or be entertained' to parallel 'relax'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typo and removed.