唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 문장 구조가 다소 길고 중복되는 표현이 있습니다. 좀 더 간결하고 명확하게 자신의 감정을 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I don't enjoy singing because I find it hard to hit the right notes. Therefore, when I go to karaoke with friends, I usually prefer to listen rather than sing.

建議: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문법적으로 부자연스러운 부분이 있습니다. 간결하게 경험을 말하고, 구체적인 예시나 느낌을 덧붙이면 좋겠습니다.

範例: Yes, I took singing lessons from elementary to high school, but I never scored well in singing classes because I struggled with pitch and rhythm.

建議: 답변이 다소 중복되고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유와 구체적인 상황을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I would like to sing for my parents and my future wife. For example, at weddings, people often sing celebration songs, so I hope to do the same when I get married.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 자신의 의견을 명확히 표현하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For instance, many people enjoy singing at parties or karaoke, which helps them relax and feel joyful.

× Actually I don't like singing because I have some personal difficulty in making correct tune for the song.

✓ Actually I don't like singing because I have some personal difficulty in making the correct tune for the song.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'correct tune'. This is an article error (ID 22). Adding 'the' specifies the particular tune being referred to, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× So when I go to the karaoke with my friends I just usually stand and listen my friends sing.

✓ So when I go to karaoke with my friends, I usually just stand and listen to my friends sing.

The phrase 'go to the karaoke' is incorrect; 'karaoke' as an activity does not require 'the'. Also, 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Additionally, the adverb order is improved by placing 'usually' before 'just'. These are preposition and adverb placement issues (IDs 11 and 20).

× Uh, in my case, I learned how to sing in during the elementary school to high school, but every moment I failed to make a great score in singing class even in elementary school, middle school and high school.

✓ Uh, in my case, I learned how to sing from elementary school to high school, but every time I failed to get a great score in singing class, even in elementary school, middle school, and high school.

The phrase 'in during' is incorrect; 'from' is the correct preposition to indicate a range. 'Every moment' should be 'every time' to express repeated occasions. Also, 'make a great score' is better expressed as 'get a great score'. These are preposition and word choice errors (IDs 11 and 13).

× Umm, I want to see for my parents.

✓ Umm, I want to sing for my parents.

The original sentence uses 'see for' which is incorrect. The question asks 'Who do you want to sing for?', so the correct verb is 'sing' and the preposition 'for' is appropriate. This is a verb and preposition usage error (IDs 13 and 11).

× Uh, I saw that many people sing their uh, celebration song in the marriage time.

✓ Uh, I saw that many people sing their celebration songs at wedding times.

'In the marriage time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'at wedding times' or 'at weddings'. Also, 'celebration song' should be plural 'celebration songs' to match 'many people'. These are preposition and singular/plural issues (IDs 11 and 1).

× So in the future when I get married with someone, I want to sing a song for my wife and also for my parents.

✓ So in the future, when I get married to someone, I want to sing a song for my wife and also for my parents.

The correct preposition after 'get married' is 'to', not 'with'. This is a preposition error (ID 11).

× As I agree with that opinion for example, we can easily see the many people going to go when they have some drinks or weekly and this makes me thinking that thing makes them people more happier.

✓ As I agree with that opinion, for example, we can easily see many people going out when they have some drinks weekly, and this makes me think that this makes people happier.

Several errors: 'the many people' should be 'many people' (quantifier error ID 14), 'going to go' is redundant and incorrect (verb form error ID 8), 'or weekly' is unclear and replaced with 'weekly' as an adverb (preposition/adverb usage ID 11/20), 'makes me thinking' should be 'makes me think' (verb form error ID 8), 'that thing makes them people more happier' is incorrect; 'more happier' is a double comparative (comparative error ID 25) and 'them people' is incorrect pronoun usage (ID 12). The corrected sentence addresses these issues.