唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and correct vocabulary errors such as 'zoners' which should be 'genres'. Also, make your answer more concise and natural by directly stating your preferences and reasons.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is my favourite hobby, especially during my free time. I like to sing various genres, including songs from Hollywood and Bollywood movies.

建議: Use correct tenses and clearer sentence structures. Avoid redundancy and be more direct. For example, clarify your past interest and current intentions with proper grammar.

範例: When I was a child, I was very keen to learn classical music, but I never had the chance to take professional singing lessons. However, I hope to pursue professional training in the future.

建議: Avoid filler sounds like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity. Also, explain your reasons more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: As a spiritual person, I would like to sing religious songs. Additionally, I plan to share my singing on YouTube to reach a wider audience and improve my skills.

建議: Avoid filler words and combine sentences for better flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why singing brings happiness.

範例: Singing plays an important role in people's lives because soothing music is pleasant to the ears. Moreover, it can calm the mind and help people to relax, which brings happiness.

× I try different kind of zoners to sing and I also like to sing uh, music from Hollywood movies as well as Bollywood movies.

✓ I try different kinds of songs to sing and I also like to sing, uh, music from Hollywood movies as well as Bollywood movies.

The phrase 'different kind of zoners' contains two errors: 'kind' should be pluralized to 'kinds' when referring to multiple types, and 'zoners' appears to be a mishearing or typo for 'songs'. The correct plural form 'kinds' is needed to agree with 'different', and 'songs' is the appropriate noun in this context.

× I would when I was a kid, I was very keen to learn about the classical music, but I have never got a chance to learn from a professional teacher about the singing.

✓ I did when I was a kid; I was very keen to learn about classical music, but I have never got a chance to learn from a professional teacher about singing.

The phrase 'I would when I was a kid' is incomplete and incorrect; 'would' needs a verb to follow. The correct past tense auxiliary 'did' is appropriate here to affirm the action. Also, 'the classical music' should be 'classical music' without 'the' as it refers to a general category.

× But whenever I got a chance, I will surely perform this activity professionally.

✓ But whenever I get a chance, I will surely perform this activity professionally.

The sentence mixes past tense 'got' with future tense 'will'. To express a future possibility, the present tense 'get' should be used with 'whenever' to indicate future occurrences, followed by 'will' for the future action.

× I'm a very spiritual kind of person, so I would love to S uh, sing religious songs and also publicize my singing skills on the YouTube channels, which will also enhance my popularity and productivity.

✓ I'm a very spiritual kind of person, so I would love to sing religious songs and also publicize my singing skills on YouTube channels, which will also enhance my popularity and productivity.

The phrase 'to S uh, sing' contains a filler 'S uh' which should be removed for clarity. Also, 'the YouTube channels' is incorrect because 'YouTube channels' is a general plural noun and does not require the definite article 'the'.

× Singing plays a pivotal role in everybody's life and if the music is soothing in nature, it will always be pleasant to the ears.

✓ Singing plays a pivotal role in everybody's life, and if the music is soothing, it will always be pleasant to the ears.

The phrase 'soothing in nature' is redundant because 'soothing' already describes the nature of the music. Removing 'in nature' makes the sentence more concise and natural.

× And uh, it brings happiness to the life of people as it has the capacity to make our mind calm and relax.

✓ And, uh, it brings happiness to people's lives as it has the capacity to make our minds calm and relaxed.

The phrase 'the life of people' is better expressed as 'people's lives' for naturalness and correctness. Also, 'our mind' should be plural 'our minds' to agree with the plural pronoun 'our'. The verb 'relax' should be in past participle 'relaxed' to correctly complete the phrase 'make our minds calm and relaxed.'