唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is honest but a bit repetitive and unclear. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I don't like singing because I find it difficult to keep the beat, and I often sing off-key, which makes it sound unpleasant.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'UMM' and correct small mistakes such as 'sitting' instead of 'singing'. Use linking words to contrast ideas clearly.

範例: No, I have never learned to sing because I am not interested in music. However, my mother enjoys singing and is currently taking lessons.

建議: Try to avoid filler words and repeated phrases. Make your sentences clearer and more structured by using linking words to explain your ideas.

範例: I would like to sing for my future husband at our wedding because since childhood, I have wanted to create a special song with lyrics for him.

建議: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your opinion clearly and logically.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because emotional songs often evoke memories, and singing them makes people feel joyful.

× I actually don't like singing because I'm not a gifted person and I always and when I sing I always think think of beat and I think wrong and it sounds difficult.

✓ I actually don't like singing because I'm not a gifted person and when I sing, I always think of the beat and I think it's wrong and it sounds difficult.

The original sentence has repetition ('always and when I sing I always think think') and missing articles ('think of beat' should be 'think of the beat'). Also, 'think wrong' is incorrect; it should be 'think it's wrong' to be grammatically correct. The correction removes repetition, adds the definite article 'the' before 'beat', and completes the phrase for clarity.

× No, I've never learned how to sing UMM because I'm not a music person, UMM, and I have no enthusiasm for this.

✓ No, I've never learned how to sing because I'm not a musical person, and I have no enthusiasm for this.

The phrase 'not a music person' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'musical' to describe a person related to music. Also, filler words 'UMM' are removed for clarity and correctness.

× On the other hand, my mom really loves sitting and she's learning how to sing.

✓ On the other hand, my mom really loves singing and she's learning how to sing.

The verb 'loves sitting' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'loves singing' to match the topic. 'Sitting' is a different verb and changes the meaning.

× I want to sing for my future husband maybe at our wedding. Umm so since being a child I wanted to make a make music with lyrics for my future spouse.

✓ I want to sing for my future husband, maybe at our wedding. Since I was a child, I have wanted to make music with lyrics for my future spouse.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and repetition ('make a make music'). The phrase 'since being a child' is incomplete; it should be 'Since I was a child'. Also, 'wanted' is past tense but the desire continues, so present perfect 'have wanted' is more appropriate.

× I would say yes, because when you think. When you sing emotional songs and you feel happy singing them because music hold memories and so yes.

✓ I would say yes, because when you sing emotional songs, you feel happy singing them because music holds memories, so yes.

The original sentence is fragmented ('because when you think. When you sing...'). The verb 'hold' should be 'holds' to agree with singular 'music'. The correction combines the fragments into a complete sentence and corrects subject-verb agreement.