唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan agak membingungkan. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata. Jelaskan alasan Anda menyukai bernyanyi dengan kalimat yang sederhana dan langsung.

範例: Yes, I have liked singing since I was five years old because my mother is a music teacher. She inspired me to love singing from a young age.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa yang membuatnya sulit dipahami. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta jelaskan proses belajar bernyanyi dengan lebih teratur.

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing from my mother. She taught me how to sing correctly, including how to control high and low notes.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang lengkap dan kalimatnya tidak selesai dengan baik. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang langsung dan lengkap, serta gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan terstruktur.

範例: Honestly, I like to sing for myself because I enjoy music. Singing helps me relax and entertain myself.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Cobalah untuk menggunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta jelaskan alasan mengapa bernyanyi bisa membuat orang bahagia.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it entertains people. When someone sings their favorite song, it can make them feel joyful and relaxed.

× I like singing since when I was a kid like 5 years old just because my mom is a teacher that teach a thing she is and that's why I I love singing.

✓ I have liked singing since I was a kid, about 5 years old, just because my mom is a teacher who teaches, and that's why I love singing.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'like' in present simple to express a duration starting in the past. The correct tense is present perfect 'have liked' to indicate an action starting in the past and continuing to the present. Also, 'teach' should be 'teaches' to agree with singular subject 'mom'. The phrase 'that teach a thing she is' is unclear and corrected to 'who teaches'.

× I like singing since when I was a kid like 5 years old just because my mom is a teacher that teach a thing she is and that's why I I love singing.

✓ I have liked singing since I was a kid, about 5 years old, just because my mom is a teacher who teaches, and that's why I love singing.

The verb 'teach' should be in third person singular form 'teaches' to agree with the singular subject 'mom'.

× Yes, I ever learned how to see are it's from my mom, so my mom teach me how to sing right correctly with the melody.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing from my mom, so my mom taught me how to sing correctly with the melody.

The phrase 'ever learned' is awkward; 'have learned' is more appropriate. 'See are' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'sing'. 'Teach' should be past tense 'taught' because the teaching happened in the past. 'Right correctly' is redundant; 'correctly' suffices.

× Yes, I ever learned how to see are it's from my mom, so my mom teach me how to sing right correctly with the melody.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing from my mom, so my mom taught me how to sing correctly with the melody.

The verb 'teach' should be in past tense 'taught' to match the past action. Also, 'mom' is singular, so verb forms must agree accordingly.

× Honestly, I think for myself it's just because I really love music and it's really entire entertaining myself.

✓ Honestly, I think for myself it's just because I really love music and it is really entertaining for me.

The phrase 'entire entertaining myself' is incorrect. 'Entire' is an adjective and does not fit here; 'entertaining' is a present participle used correctly but needs proper object. 'Entertaining for me' is the correct expression.

× When I were when I were singing some song, it was really good for my.

✓ When I was singing some songs, it was really good for me.

The subject 'I' requires 'was' not 'were' in past tense. 'Some song' should be plural 'some songs' or 'a song'. The phrase 'good for my' is incomplete; 'good for me' is correct.

× Umm yes, because singing is very entertaining people and making them very enjoyable.

✓ Umm yes, because singing is very entertaining for people and makes them very happy.

The verb 'entertaining' needs the preposition 'for' to connect to 'people'. 'Making them very enjoyable' is incorrect; 'making them very happy' or 'making them enjoy themselves' is correct.

× When someone is singing is sing is singing their favorite song and it can make them to have more.

✓ When someone is singing their favorite song, it can make them feel happier.

The phrase 'make them to have more' is incorrect; 'make them feel happier' or 'make them enjoy more' is appropriate. Also, redundant 'is sing is singing' is removed for clarity.