唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to be more concise and correct phrases like "a way for us to really stress" to "a way to relieve stress." Also, avoid mixing topics (singing and dancing) unless clearly connected. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress. Additionally, singing allows me to express my emotions without using words, which I find very comforting.

建議: There are several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases here. For example, "learn how to say" should be "learn how to sing," and "release my emotions" should be "releases my emotions." Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct verb forms. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

範例: No, I haven't formally learned how to sing. I believe singing requires a lot of practice and emotional expression, which I haven't focused on yet. However, I enjoy singing casually because it helps me relax and express my feelings.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more concise and formal. Avoid filler phrases like "you know" and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct informal expressions such as "gonna" to "going to."

範例: I would like to sing for my relatives and close friends because I feel more confident and comfortable sharing my voice with people I trust.

建議: Good answer with a clear example. However, there is a typo: "seeing" should be "singing." Also, try to use linking words like "for instance" or "for example" to introduce examples more smoothly. Avoid redundancy such as "me myself."

範例: Yes, I strongly believe that singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, when I feel upset, my friend sings my favorite song to cheer me up, which really lifts my mood.

× No I haven't formally learn how to say.

✓ No, I haven't formally learned how to sing.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past participle form 'learned' after 'haven't' to form the present perfect tense correctly. Also, 'say' is incorrect here; it should be 'sing' to match the context.

× I think that thing requires a lot of effort in like expressing our emotion and like makes a lot of practice which I haven't focused on yet.

✓ I think that thing requires a lot of effort in expressing our emotions and requires a lot of practice, which I haven't focused on yet.

The phrase 'like expressing' is informal and redundant; 'in expressing' is correct. Also, 'makes a lot of practice' is incorrect; it should be 'requires a lot of practice' to convey the intended meaning. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context.

× However, sometimes I enjoy singing because it just release my emotions and relax.

✓ However, sometimes I enjoy singing because it just releases my emotions and relaxes me.

The verbs 'release' and 'relax' need to agree with the singular subject 'it' and be in the third person singular form 'releases' and 'relaxes'. Also, 'relax' should have an object 'me' to complete the meaning.

× Well, I think it's gonna be a lot.

✓ Well, I think there will be a lot.

'Gonna' is informal and 'be a lot' is vague. Using 'there will be a lot' is more grammatically correct and formal for future tense.

× So to be honest, I really want to sing to my relative or some of my close friend, you know, like they need to be very close to me so that I can feel very confident and free to let them hear my voice.

✓ So to be honest, I really want to sing to my relatives or some of my close friends, you know, they need to be very close to me so that I can feel very confident and free to let them hear my voice.

The nouns 'relative' and 'friend' should be plural 'relatives' and 'friends' to match 'some of' and the plural pronoun 'them' used later.

× I strongly believe that seeing can bring happiness and some good feelings to people.

✓ I strongly believe that singing can bring happiness and some good feelings to people.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; it should be 'singing' to match the context of the conversation about singing.