唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain how singing helps you relieve stress.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it is one of my hobbies. Nowadays, I often feel stressed, so singing helps me to relax and refresh my mind.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct tenses and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repetition and explain your learning experience more logically with linking words.

範例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I learned to sing informally from my grandfather, who had a karaoke machine. I used to sing with him, which helped me improve.

建議: Make your answer more natural by using smoother sentence flow and linking words. Also, try to expand your answer slightly with reasons or feelings to enrich the content.

範例: To be honest, I usually sing just for myself because I'm not a good singer. However, I enjoy singing as it makes me feel happy and relaxed.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence coherence by using linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Listening to music or someone singing can refresh our minds, and singing ourselves can also help us feel relaxed and joyful.

× Yes I do because one of the my hobby to sing and nowadays I sacrifice from a lot of stress so my singing I can refresh.

✓ Yes, I do because singing is one of my hobbies and nowadays I suffer from a lot of stress, so singing helps me refresh.

The phrase 'one of the my hobby' is incorrect; it should be 'one of my hobbies' to correctly use the quantifier and possessive pronoun. Also, 'sacrifice from a lot of stress' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'suffer from'. The sentence structure is adjusted for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I don't. I have never learned how to sing. But my grandfather, he had his own private singing machine, karaoke machine, so I was I. That means I learned from him how to sing.

✓ No, I haven't. I have never learned how to sing. But my grandfather had his own private karaoke machine, so I learned from him how to sing.

The response to 'Have you ever learnt' should be in present perfect tense, so 'No, I don't' is incorrect; it should be 'No, I haven't'. The phrase 'so I was I' is unclear and unnecessary, so it is removed for clarity. The rest is corrected for smoother flow.

× To be honest, to nobody for myself because I'm not a good singer, but I just like to sing.

✓ To be honest, I sing for myself and nobody else because I'm not a good singer, but I just like to sing.

The phrase 'to nobody for myself' is confusing and incorrect pronoun usage. It is corrected to 'I sing for myself and nobody else' to clearly express the intended meaning.

× I think so. By listening to music, hearing somebody singing, we can refresh. And also by singing also we can, I, I can, I can refresh.

✓ I think so. By listening to music and hearing someone sing, we can feel refreshed. Also, by singing ourselves, we can refresh.

The original sentences have awkward structure and repetition ('I, I can'). The correction improves sentence flow and clarity, using proper verb forms and removing redundancy.