唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "It's type of great way" and "Dance even it's type of recreational way". Focus on one main idea per sentence and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my feelings and recharge emotionally when I'm relaxed, sad, or lonely. Similarly, dancing is another recreational activity I enjoy for the same reason.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains some awkward phrasing such as "learned about that" and "if I can only seem to express my emotions". Try to use more natural expressions and link your ideas clearly.

範例: No, I haven't learned how to sing formally, but I hope to have the opportunity in the future. I understand that singing requires guidance, but for now, being able to express my emotions through singing is enough for me.

建議: Your answer is heartfelt but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words like "especially" to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary such as "support" instead of "give me help".

範例: I would like to sing for my best friend Lynn because she always supports me when I'm feeling down. Especially during difficult times, like my breakup or stressful days at work, she has been there for me, so singing for her would be a way to express my gratitude.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains several language errors and unclear phrases like "cynic can cheer someone up". Make sure to use correct vocabulary and grammar, and organise your ideas logically with linking words.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can cheer people up, even during tough times. For example, when I was going through a difficult breakup, a friend shared some emotional songs with me that helped lift my spirits.

× It's type of great way to express my feeling and to help myself to recharge.

✓ It's a great way to express my feelings and to help myself recharge.

The phrase 'type of' is incorrectly used here; the correct expression is 'a great way'. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context. The infinitive 'to help myself to recharge' should be 'to help myself recharge' without the extra 'to'.

× Dance even it's type of recreational way to help in to recharge myself.

✓ Dancing is also a recreational way to help me recharge.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Dance even it's type of' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Dancing is also a recreational way'. The phrase 'help in to recharge myself' is incorrect; it should be 'help me recharge'.

× No, I haven't learned about that, but I wish I could have a chance to learn that in the future.

✓ No, I haven't learned that, but I wish I could have a chance to learn it in the future.

The phrase 'learned about that' is awkward; 'learned that' is more appropriate. Also, 'learn that' is better replaced with 'learn it' to avoid repetition. The tense is correct but the phrasing can be improved for clarity.

× I do notice that singing is a skill which we need to have some guidance, but I feel like if I can only seem to express my emotions, that's enough for me right now.

✓ I do notice that singing is a skill for which we need some guidance, but I feel that if I can just express my emotions, that's enough for me right now.

The phrase 'which we need to have some guidance' is incorrect; it should be 'for which we need some guidance'. Also, 'if I can only seem to express' is awkward; 'if I can just express' is clearer and more natural.

× Especially when I have the breakdown with my ex-boyfriend or when I didn't have a great day with some problem during work.

✓ Especially when I had a breakdown with my ex-boyfriend or when I didn't have a great day because of some problems at work.

The phrase 'have the breakdown' should be past tense 'had a breakdown'. Also, 'some problem during work' is better expressed as 'some problems at work'. The tense consistency is important here.

× She always helped me, that's why I would like to express my emotion to her.

✓ She always helped me; that's why I would like to express my emotions to her.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context. Also, the two clauses should be separated properly with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× Yes exactly, I always believe that cynic can cheer someone up even there in their experience some tough times.

✓ Yes, exactly, I always believe that singing can cheer someone up even when they are experiencing tough times.

The word 'cynic' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. The phrase 'even there in their experience some tough times' is ungrammatical; it should be 'even when they are experiencing tough times'.

× For example when I was having suffering breakdown with my ex-boyfriend, my friend show me some really nice song which made me feel a bit better because they are so emotional and cheer me up.

✓ For example, when I was suffering a breakdown with my ex-boyfriend, my friend showed me some really nice songs which made me feel a bit better because they were so emotional and cheered me up.

The phrase 'was having suffering breakdown' is incorrect; it should be 'was suffering a breakdown'. The verb 'show' should be past tense 'showed' to match the past context. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' to agree with 'some'. The verbs 'are' and 'cheer' should be past tense 'were' and 'cheered' respectively to maintain tense consistency.