唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有点长且有语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。例如，避免使用“went out for a union”，可以说“went out for a gathering”。

範例: I am not very fond of singing, but when my colleagues and I go out together, I often sing for them. I like Justin Bieber because he became famous at a young age.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议使用正确的句子结构，避免重复，并用连接词使回答更连贯。

範例: Yes, my friends and I joined a singing class where we learned how to position our tongues properly. The teacher was very patient and taught us many useful singing techniques.

建議: 回答内容有情感，但表达不够流畅，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。

範例: I would like to sing for my parents because we rarely express our love directly. In Chinese culture, people are often shy to say 'I love you,' so singing a song is a good way to show my feelings.

建議: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，建议完整表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并举例说明。

範例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness. Research shows that music affects our brain positively. For example, songs with meaningful lyrics and good rhythms can lift people's moods and reduce stress.

× Actually, I am not a big fan of singing, but every time my colleagues and I went out for a union, I always asked to sing a song for them.

✓ Actually, I am not a big fan of singing, but every time my colleagues and I go out for a union, I always ask to sing a song for them.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' and 'asked' with the present tense context implied by 'every time'. To express habitual actions, the present tense should be used ('go' and 'ask').

× Thus, I practiced a lot and my favorite singer is Justin Bieber, who gains fame in a very young age.

✓ Thus, I practiced a lot and my favorite singer is Justin Bieber, who gained fame at a very young age.

The verb 'gains' should be in past tense 'gained' because it refers to a completed action in the past. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate age.

× Yeah, and I'm my friends and I even joined a class to tell how to sing, how to put our tongues properly in our mouth.

✓ Yeah, my friends and I even joined a class to learn how to sing, how to put our tongues properly in our mouths.

The phrase 'I'm my friends and I' is incorrect; it should be 'my friends and I'. Also, 'to tell how to sing' is incorrect; 'to learn how to sing' is appropriate. 'Our mouth' should be plural 'our mouths' to match the plural subject.

× That's quite help a lot.

✓ That helps a lot.

'That's quite help a lot' is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'That helps a lot' to express that it is helpful.

× Helps a lot because the teacher is very patient and she teaches, she taught us a lot of skills about how to sing well.

✓ It helps a lot because the teacher is very patient and she taught us a lot of skills about how to sing well.

The sentence lacks a subject at the beginning; 'Helps a lot' should be 'It helps a lot' to be grammatically correct.

× Definitely my parents, because we have never expressed our love for each other in any circumstance.

✓ Definitely my parents, because we have never expressed our love for each other under any circumstance.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'under any circumstance' is the correct phrase to express the meaning.

× Yeah, you know, Chinese people are very shy to say those words that contains love.

✓ Yeah, you know, Chinese people are very shy to say those words that contain love.

The verb 'contains' should agree with the plural noun 'words', so it should be 'contain'.

× So I think I will find some time to tell them by by sing a song.

✓ So I think I will find some time to tell them by singing a song.

The phrase 'by by sing a song' is incorrect. The correct form is 'by singing a song' using the gerund after 'by'.

× Definitely. And there are many surveys and researches about how songs can affect people's brain.

✓ Definitely. And there are many surveys and research studies about how songs can affect people's brains.

'Researches' is incorrect as 'research' is uncountable; 'research studies' is better. Also, 'people's brain' should be plural 'people's brains' because it refers to multiple individuals.

× I mean, a song contains many, many elements like rhythms and the lyrics, if those are into someone's heart, they are absolutely giving the person the chance to.

✓ I mean, a song contains many, many elements like rhythms and lyrics; if those enter someone's heart, they absolutely give the person a chance to feel happy.

'The lyrics' should be 'lyrics' without 'the'. 'If those are into someone's heart' is incorrect; it should be 'if those enter someone's heart'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; it needs completion for clarity.