唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons or examples to support your statements.

範例: I don't enjoy singing much these days, but I love listening to Nepali and traditional music. However, when I was a child, I really enjoyed singing and even took part in several school competitions.

建議: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, be specific about your experience and avoid awkward phrasing.

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in fifth and sixth grade, I practiced singing with my teachers to prepare for various school competitions.

建議: Make your answer more fluent by removing filler words and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear reasons for your preferences.

範例: I prefer to sing for myself rather than to impress others. However, I would like to sing for my parents too, but since I lack proper singing skills and confidence in my voice, I don't sing much these days.

建議: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence coherence by using linking words. Provide more specific examples or reasons to support your opinion and ensure grammatical accuracy.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because many enjoy it as a hobby and an important part of their lives. Additionally, some people earn a living through singing, which helps support their families.

× Looking in today's world, I'm not quite fond of singing, but I always prefer to listen to a Nepali and typical music.

✓ Looking at today's world, I'm not quite fond of singing, but I always prefer to listen to Nepali and typical music.

The phrase 'Looking in today's world' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to observing or considering something. Also, 'a Nepali and typical music' is incorrect because 'music' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. The correct phrase is 'Nepali and typical music' without 'a'.

× ...that's why I participated in many singing competition.

✓ ...that's why I participated in many singing competitions.

The word 'competition' should be plural 'competitions' because 'many' refers to more than one event.

× Yes, I've learned how to sing. And when I was a kid studying in five or six classes, I practiced singing with my teachers that for participating in several school competition.

✓ Yes, I've learned how to sing. And when I was a kid studying in fifth or sixth grade, I practiced singing with my teachers to participate in several school competitions.

The phrase 'studying in five or six classes' is unnatural; 'fifth or sixth grade' is more appropriate. Also, 'that for participating' is incorrect; it should be 'to participate'. 'School competition' should be plural 'school competitions' because it refers to multiple events.

× I practiced singing with my teachers that for participating in several school competition.

✓ I practiced singing with my teachers to participate in several school competitions.

The phrase 'that for participating' is incorrect; the correct preposition and structure is 'to participate' indicating purpose.

× As far as I'm concerned, I always want to sing for myself, not for impressing other people.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I always want to sing for myself, not to impress other people.

The phrase 'not for impressing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'not to impress' because 'to' + verb is used to express purpose.

× However, I also want to sing for my parents, but I don't know any knowledge of singing and my voice is not that good so I don't prefer singing now.

✓ However, I also want to sing for my parents, but I don't have any knowledge of singing and my voice is not that good, so I don't prefer singing now.

The phrase 'I don't know any knowledge' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I don't have any knowledge'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× Some people earn money from singing with can help their family to live.

✓ Some people earn money from singing which can help their family to live.

The phrase 'with can help' is incorrect; it should be 'which can help' to correctly connect the clauses.